1) Her blouse wafted in the breeze. 2) Her blue blouse wafted in the breeze.
CONSIDER: The second one is more concrete; it evokes a better picture of the girl's blouse. But the first example, one could argue, offers more participation; readers can decide what colour the blouse is in their own minds.
So, which is better?
Kevin Rodriguez
Second one has two words in a row that start with "bl", don't do that
Gabriel Robinson
Her blouse wafted in the blue breeze.
Cooper Carter
I like the first one more, the color of the blouse iisn't important also this
Blake James
The waffle breezed in her blouse.
Robert Murphy
What's wrong with two words beginning with 'bl'? Is alliteration to be avoided in prose?
Logan Anderson
Why do writers, then, even when these details aren't important, still feel the need to include them? Are even professional writers scared that they'll be, in some way, misunderstood?
Charles Scott
Don't use adjectives unless they're necessary. In this case introduce the blouse as blue elsewhere, since it interrupts the flow of the sentence.
Justin Nelson
Would caress her inner thighs and crotch and smell my hands after
Ayden Morgan
Huh... That's sound. I suppose it's good to keep a tally of these unnecessary details and find places later in the story where they pay off better. Thanks.
Brody Morris
Lol wafted wtf kinda aesthetics is that
Josiah Nelson
She thicc.
Lucas Sanchez
A blue blouse, ungirdled, was sustained gently behind her on the mild morning air
Evan Brooks
Suggest a better word, then, lil nigga.
Joshua Ross
Wafted connotes bad smells
Try "fluttered" or some shit
Brody Evans
>sustained 5 cent word trying to fill a 15 cent's shoes
Luis Harris
1 The first flows better.
Camden Carter
thanks, lil nigga.
i agree. he's some purple prose fag.
agree. thanks
Jordan Price
Hey shitbreeches, are you doing the hat trick?
James Collins
It sounds weird when it's not being done intentionally. Alliteration isn't necessarily bad though.
Andrew Evans
As she walked the breeze played with the frill of her blouse.
Alexander Taylor
More like I would "breeze" her blouse with my penis if you know what i mean hehe
Alexander Cox
Are you saying you'd fuck her?? Wtf
Nathaniel Reed
3)The Nothing itself nothings.
Jace Richardson
It's Joyce, morons.
Jack Hughes
>trying this hard to recover from being blown out >you can't kek this shit up >capped and saved
Nolan Bennett
If irony 6/10
Asher Davis
3/10 at best
Ayden Price
Why blouse and not skirt, or even her hair, if only a few strands of it? Is the girl stationary or moving along? Sails don't waft, they billow, and a blouse is more like a sail than a football.. I think what's needed here is a little context.
Nicholas Foster
Wafting makes me think of farts. Any advice you get here is pure preference.
Levi Davis
Her blouse wafted in the breeze, bluely.
John Sullivan
Her blouse blued in the wafting breeze
Jacob Rodriguez
I'd let her breezes waft the blue hairs in my nose if you catch my drift
Mason Gomez
Blew
Dominic Evans
The blue blouse blew with the billowing breeze.
Evan Kelly
The blue blouse blew with the billowing wind, blissfully oblivious to it's bleak and barren future.
All me, I'm writing a book btw
Isaac Murphy
>wind Goddamnit I had one job
Evan Allen
nothing's wrong; please alliterate all you want especially if it occurs naturally
Angel Myers
There she stood, in a blue blouse and a black skirt. And her blouse wafted in the breeze.
John Evans
who cares.
lmao.
Bentley Gomez
can you post more kpop thighs for me?
Jack Flores
kek
Kayden Ortiz
A breeze wafted from her blouse
Gavin Cox
Does the color matter in the story?
Cooper Flores
A BRAAAAAAAAAAAAP wafted from her blouse.
Connor Peterson
No way to tell without context. But it's not like you're actually writing anything so who cares?