Greentext the plot of your new novel

It's not like it's going anywhere

>implying women are second class citizens

incarceration rates, homelessness, level of education all say otherwise

>green text

I just explained to you that they are already first class citizens. Can you read? Can you read this?

who is this mammary gallery

I want to bite her bitties.

>gay prostitute leaves the business
>he doesn't understand that his weird sexual shit should be kept private, so he goes out wearing a pink collar and leash and sometimes with his arms bound
>his old pimp begs him to come back, but he declines
>meanwhile one of his previous clients is in love with him
>shit ensues

I just finished one that I'm editing while a friend draws me a book cover to help me self-publish it. The plots not very interesting and I'm not sure I can do it justice but here goes:

1/2

>protagonist is ageless, the way it's written never really lets you know whether he is really human
>protagonist crash lands on a new planet
>he soon discovers the planet is earth like, as he sees a trio of mounted horsemen approach his crash site
>they take him in and he learns their language before riding off to explore the continent
>discovers a land of squabbling Houses in the south
>is treated like a dog because they think he is a northern tribesman
>eventually learns their language too, has enough and heads north-west
>is stranded on a islet while traversing a huge inland sea
>islet is haunted by a legendary water spirit
>he later finds the spirit preying on him in the night, but he recognises her species/race and speaks to her, she goes into shock
>they spend the next morning embracing each other and talking about their place
>eventually she disappears and he sees a ship that rescues him
>they sail to a colony, and the captain of the ship is murdered in the town by one of his own crewmen
>protag forces local townsfolk to pay him to scare the crew off
>succeeds, then buys a horse and wanders the rest of the continent doing shenanigans
>next part of the book he spends destroying a native tribe so that colonists can move in
>gets forced into a pressgang to sail the western ocean, the ship loses supplies and everyone except him starves and dies
>has some form of hallucination where the moon goddess speaks to him using a little version of that goddess as his perspective

>plot

2/2

>wakes up back on the continent, but looks at his reflection in the water and he has a new body (he is no longer a pale white man but a bronze/olive man)
>spends the next part as a rich merchant class elite with a northern witch that he looks after, and he looks up to her like an authority figure
>later find out the south is being invaded by some pale man that united the northern tribes into a big horde
>man helps his Lord prepare for the invasion by offering a gift to the invader
>the day the pale man comes, the protagonist knows him as his former self, however he an old man now, as a lot of time passed between the ship episode and then
>northern witch is the pale man's wife
>protag joins them in their campaign, but eventually tells them he will go to the religious center of the continent and wait for their arrivial
>on the way to this religious center, he meets two merchants taking a slave with them to sell to the religious lord's bodyguard commander
>young man interprets dreams and has visions of prophecy
>sees everything that will come: the pale man becomes the first King of the Continent, the young man will become the next religious leader
>but he can't see the protagonists future
>more events transpire on the way
>the pale man finally arrives at the city with his huge army, but looks old and defeated: his wife died on campaign
>time skips ahead again as the protagonist skims over the whole coronation and founding the empire
>he is now wondering an island trying desperate to convert the natives to the religion of the continent (oh which he converted to not long after the ship episode)
>his attempts at evangalism are in vain
>eventually gives up and looks back on what happened
>in a sort of moment of clarity while in prayer, he simply laughs
>epilogue is him describing the scene before him while he writes: long long into the future on another world, a woman is singing and throwing pebbles into a pond


But yeah, the plot is very entertaining as much as I think the way I think it's written.

is not very entertaining*

>alien mercenary has a teleporter accident and ends up on a dust bin of a world but that's ok
>gets off the planet, his blue semen demon cyclopean best friend who is also a merc talks to him about a new job he got
>our burnt-out protagonist decides to join him and He Does It For Free (tm)
>they go to space station, meet spacefurry lynx who doesnt have a tail, find out their job is to cure another spacefurry of Space AIDS or something like that
>protagonist goes to grassy planet, finds skeletons n shit
>goes back, meets spacefurry foxcop with head-crushing legs, gets told the furry with Space AIDS is her sister, doesnt care
>goes back to jungle planet, gets told sister perished from her disease by now-sad foxcop
>protagonist finds sister alive and well but marooned on jungle planet
>lynx actually has her own ulterior motives and marooned her there to do something but she doesnt know what
>lynx somehow cloned fox sister but passed off the sickly clone as her
>cloning is supposed to be impossible
>protagonist goes back to spess station where the rest of the cast is, lynx managed to hack the neural implants of a few clones (disposable soldiers and workers based off of humans essentially), made them slaughter people in the medbay while she made her escape
>cyclops friend and protag make it to the maintenance halls where the lynx is hiding, get seperated and fight the clones
>protag is disemboweled and gets hand blasted off by lynx
>begins to have their flesh cut open while the lynx calls them a stoopid idiot for messing with her actually-good plans
>gets fire axe spike through neck as protag manages to retrieve the lynx's shotgun and blast her through the chest

>scene change to when protag is in hospital, his new stump suddenly starts hurting a ton and it gets amputated even more, gets a cool new robot arm before deciding to quit being a merc
>quits and gets a house on a grove anchored to the space station the mercs work out of
>clone tries to kill him
>literally disarm clone by ripping off their arm and stabbing them in the eye with it using their new robutt hand
>all the other houses are empty
>wat
>protag goes to gun store on bumfuck planet, buys shit tons of guns just in case
>blue cyclops best friend is back, manages to convince them to do one one more job For Free, they accept

1/2

2/2

>protag goes back to dust bin world they were on in the beginning
>have to depose a petty dictator
>protag breaks into their fortress and finds """kobolds""" (short lizard aliums that look like dnd kobolds) held captive as living sex toys
>frees one named Helmin, Helmin takes a Sterling carbine from one of the guards and YARK YARKs off
>protag goes to kick in the shit of the dictator, blasts the hell out of the guards with his Gabbet-Fairfax Mars and re-appropriated Sterling Carbine
>has short fight with dictator who is a crow with literally a beak made of gold, dictatorcrow's sister appears
>she helped protag in the beginning in order to get to a city that had a radio to call for help
>sister accidentally gets shot by dictatorcrow, dies ded
>dictatorcrow bawls his eyes out, protag spares skinning him and just hugs him
>suddenly a strange recurring voice that the protag keeps hearing fills their ears, along with the ears of all the other main characters, freezing them in place
>all are given nicknames that are the same as the 7 deadly sins (Greed, Envy, etc) even though there isnt 7 of them
>characters are unfrozen
>time skip
>protag shoots themselves
>the end of episode 1

that's just the prologue chapter. the book is 5 episodes long, and each episode is cut into 5 parts. i'm running it as a web serial and i've got a heck of a lot to go, and while most of the writing and the general plot of ep 1 is kinda dumb and convoluted respectively i've improved massively for episode 2.

writing is really fun

>Two people stuck in an elevator.

>Beautiful but strange young man, last member of a wealthy New England family, is in love with the old, once glorious and now decaying opera house he owns
>suave and charming young businessman wants to buy it and tear it down to build a new, better one, scion refuses to sell
>businessman goes to increasingly illegal lengths to acquire it, from simple pestering to blackmailing county officials to a murder
>eventually is seized under "eminent domain", scion is distraught, would rather "willingly" sell it than have it taken, but wishes to hold one last opera, spends an enormous sum fixing the place up
>at the final performance - a perormance of Tosca - everyone gathers, and he pays some drifters to lock everyone inside and set the place on fire, and he watches from the top balcony as everyone, himself included, burns to death

Supposed to be a weird gothic novel

>A cracks opens in the sky and leads to another planet that supports human life
>At first everyone is hyped about it but as time goes on everyone loses interest and they end up using it as an extraterrestial Australia where they dump criminals
>One guy has romanticized human potential and desires to travel to that place even tho is common knowledge is pretty much a one way trip

I'm still thinking the rest but the ending pretty much involves them contacting humanity again and finding out they really don't give a shit about that planet and they'll keep sending more people over.

>man wakes up with mysterious plastic knob on the back of his head.
>does outrageously stupid things to end up in absurd situations

>Slice of life during the end of the world
>In a twist, the world doesn't end.
>Awkward for some, disappointing to others, and amidst hollow celebration it's clear that surviving did not bring us any further towards unity and brotherly love, but hey, it's not the end of the world.

>A future where genetically modified humans are the standard.
>People are born into their bodies unwillingly brought into society.
>Some richer families are granted better physical structures and attributes.
>Designer babies and genetic engineering becomes the norm.
>However, people who were born perfectly naturally or were born before the craze are seen as imperfect and futile, so they are discriminated against covertly in society.
>Eventually the covert and individualistic discrimination is publicly accepted and eventually even promoted by governments and media.
>The naturally born are forced to live in slums, performing tasks of medial labor in factories away from the cities of the augmented.
>Soon crimes against humanity are committed by the genetically modified against the normal and the genetically modified that protect the normal.
>Genocide ensues, and some work camps are turned into enslavement and execution camps.
>Genetic modification goes so far that some humans are bred with purposes of running low class industrial jobs while others are bred like animals to be super soldiers and some are bred to be celebrities and leaders.
>Certain individuals are even created to be less human-like and are used in the terraforming of other planets, having strange physical mutations that aid them in their jobs.
>Some humans are born abominations, either screwed up in the designer process or are of a faulty genetic model, and are cast aside; all viewed in a light lower than the non-modified and this also thrown into the genocide mix.
>Some genetically modified realize the discrimination against the abominations and non-modified and begin to protect them and even form relationships where they interbreed.
>However, eventually there is a revolution where the normal rise up from the ashes and point out that they didn't ask to be born better or worse than the genetically modified.
>They throw over the genetically modified in a mix of violent uprisings and peaceful protests depending on their situations, and eventually win.
>A violent war ensues, where a group of genetically modified claiming that the natural aren't even worthy of being labeled as intelligent creatures begins to use military force to wipe out the natural and abominations.
>Nonetheless, the natural win, and reform society from the ashes of the war.
>However, eventually individuals who are not natural or abominations or are classified as supporters of the non-modified begin to despise the genetically modified (even those who were bred for medial labor) and their offspring.
>The non-modified and abominations begin to discriminate and eventually commit crimes against humanity against the modified in the exact same way the modified committed war crimes against them.
>Then the modified, who were once promoted from the special to the supreme, are brought down to the value of the filth of the Earth.
>tl;dr History repeats itself but gets the details wrong; no one asks to be born.

>pasty, balding, bespectacled man in his early 40s
>holds a b.a. in religious studies from an almost-first tier university
>lack of contacts and merely good gpa prevented him from going to an ivy league, settled for a phd in librarian sciences at a state college
>falls further down the rungs, teaches intro philosophy classes at a community college until a scandal hits and the place is unaccredited and closed down
>a few years of neet-dom with his mom pursue
>finds employment as a junior high debate club coach
>misunderstood genius in his own mind, hates his job
>spends it alternating between sleeping and bullying 13 year old marxists
>every year a new batch of kids to cleanse of the leftist public school system's indoctrination, it all feels futile
>mother dies of cancer, clerical error in her will causes their home to be donated to a pigeon rescue charity
>he receives $1000 in millet futures
>the first day of his sixth year teaching begins, he's considering suicide
>notices a girl wearing a Rush t-shirt
>she begins lecturing on the non-aggression principle and he is immediately smitten with her
>starts writing up class outlines and shit like no one's business, feels like he's only 28 again
>most of the class hates it but she always does well
>after she finishes 7th grade, she continues to see him and ask for help
>after a couple years, the relationship turns intimate because she is attracted to the fact that he's a free-thinker and he likes how she isn't like all the other girls
>all kept on the down-low of course
>every moment he isn't thinking about her, he's thinking about his own college application experience and what he would have done differently so that she won't make the same mistakes
>she has a 7.0 GPA and a 3160 on the new SAT and is full of charisma and her father is a professor at the school she's going to so it's not like she really needed it
>but drafts a 20 page letter of recommendation for her anyways
>over the summer she sends him a letter about an opening at the college for a full-time writing tutor and part-time instructor
>her connections get him in easy
>suddenly he notices that she seems more distant than usual
>she invites him to a speech she's giving at the student union, part of her honor's program
>it's about her struggle with sexual abuse she incurred during adolescence and gaining the courage to overcome it
>it takes 5 minutes to realize that she's talking about him, even though enough small details are changed to prevent anyone else from making that connection
>doesn't mention anything about it the next time she shows up to tutoring, but instead casually asks for photocopies of old exams and keys and whatnot
>like that he becomes her slave
>starts questioning himself, did he really force himself onto her, is he really a rapist
>she starts asking about why they haven't been intimate in a long time and it's too much of a mockery
>commits suicide
>her dad was actually the rapist the whole time

10/10 would read. I'd write a screenplay and sell it to Guillermo Del Toro if I were you.

>all these sci-fi plots
What are you, 16?

>Man gets trapped inside infinite stairway, as his life in paradox gets intertwined with woman from distant past locked inside shrivelling room.

Le XDDD Huss defintley yuss.

Nigga we aren't like those crazy freethinkers. We try to express our creativity as much as possible until we realize that it's all impossible, so we make it possible in our head by slapping the Science Fiction approval of bullshit seal on it. It helps us sleep at night knowing our fantasies may just be conceivable, even if they aren't at all.

I'd read it.
Sort of stoner cross Lolita feel.

The ending sentence being "but hey, at least its not the end of the world" would be so dope

> Middle aged man dies
> New young pastor preaches funeral sermon
> Noonecomestofuneral.jpg
> Young pastor is depressed as hell and wants to find out what's so bad about this guy
> Turns out that he was just a socially awkward penguin and wasn't good a making friends.
> ...
> Pastor's faith is shaken because people are assholes to mistrust anyone that isn't extroverted like them.
> ...
> exploration of depression and loneliness
> the end.

A kid thinks he's the chosen one, but really he's not the chosen one and everything he's pursuing is an impossible fantasy which he very slowly and hesitantly comes to first accept then embrace.

He'll end up killing himself indirectly.

>Man falls in love with a spider as she drinks the milk in his porridge
>She abuses him, bites him, drinks his blood, feeds off him, has sex with him
>Disappears, reappears, has children, eats them when they suckle too tightly
>Man realises that a fly swatter can be used on spiders, but understands that he uses her more than she uses him

> magical war going on
> all young people in the village with magical talent go to war and are killed
> only old men and women with weak magic and children are left
> village is attacked because no one is left to defend it
> seven old men decide to go out and find mercs to protect the town.
>Together their weak magic can be fused to make the power of one regular person's magic
> one is a drunk
> one is a wife beater
> one is a former pedo, now a eunuch
> one is a one handed thief
> one has dementia
> one is a coward
> most find redemption of some kind,
> some die
> village saved

>awkward russian guy goes moves to usa after being cucked by his wife
>teaches russian at university
>speaks terrible english
>just an awkward guy who falls into silly situations

i really have no idea where this is going and i am already 100/300 pages in.

Those tits tho

Finnish boy becomes a priest at the chapel where his Swedish mother was buried because he feels her death of pneumonia on their fishing boat was his fault.

ai shinozaki

Posted it on another thread. This is an updated version

> Guy is depressed
>Trying to off himself at the zoo, a chimpanzee stops him
>They become the bestest of friends
>Later is revealed the chimpanzee has terminal cancer
>At the funeral, guy gives his eulogy about how the chimp taught him to live life at it's fullest

>leftist public school
Kek

freg

Then people start dying in the neighborhood and the priest realizes his mother's lingering grudge for him has kept her from passing on and she's come back as a wraith. But instead of blaming him for her death, the resentment binding her to the mortal world is something else, which leads him to research the life of his divorced father and his new family.

Do short stories count?
>guy wakes up
>trapped inside a room with a strange woman
>she takes strange measurements of him and he feels overall uncomfortable but cant remember anything about his past
>he wants to leave the room
>he does
its actually similar to yours user.

>Present day, masqueraded world
>A female apprentice just graduated from her apprenticeship from a Hogwarts-esque academy that trains people to use magic and swordsmanship (Think of the Military order of Christendom in the medieval ages )
>Goes to a town with her new master that is suffering from paranormal and supernatural crimes.
>Investigating in a midnight walk she sees some guy wearing a mask no one else could see with blood on his clothes
>Required to know more intensifies
>Follows him until a certain where she loses him.
>She goes back to her master
>Master tells her apprentice its some dark mage who is using necromancy
>The search to find this necromancer begins
>High and low they search but they could not find said necromancer
>Female apprentice sees the same person with the mask and bloody clothes carrying a woman walking down the street
>She puts two and two together and tells her master about him
>They follow him out of the city as to not include any innocent people in the inevitable fight.
>Muh honor
>Mask man tell them he doesn't want to fight and that the necromancer has already been dealt with and any other supernatural in the city
>Fight ensues anyways
>Master and apprentice wake up later in a hospital bed
>Book was never about them.

Would love to read this. Keep working hard user :)

>he doesn't understand that his weird sexual shit should be kept private
Why should it be?
8/10 otherwise. Might steal.

>self-publishing
Don't even have to read that wall of green text to know it's shit. 0/10

>alien mercenary
0/10

4/10

That ending is terrible.
4/10

Interesting concept but you need more going on.
6/10

lmao
10/10

I had an idea almost exactly like this and put it in my writing journal awhile ago. Good luck.
9/10

Eh.
6/10

Suicide is almost never a way to end the book because it's almost always a device rather than a conclusion. Not a terrible premise but you sound awfully pretentious.
7/10 anyway.

mite b cool
6/10

kys

Sounds a bit like your diary, desu
6/10

>killing himself
Jesus, Veeky Forums get your shit together.

Are you high or something?
3/10

>Magical war
Dropped. 0/10

Eh. 4/10

2/10

Nice.
7/10

Mmm... eh.
5/10

>female
1/10

Wow! Never post again!

>2/10

In all fairness to user, I was only making fun of him and my post was not really part of his story.

>mad that his genre fiction idea is shit
:^)

>there's a group of people around my age
>they are also as sad as me

Nice story, Satan.

How long is this supposed to be? It kinda reminds me of what ı'm writing.

I want to read this. How can I find it when it comes out?

Lovely

It's fairly short, around 45k words but the manuscript is for a 5x8" trim size so it's 216 pages.

>>self-publishing
>Don't even have to read that wall of green text to know it's shit. 0/10

What's wrong with self-publishing?

>What's wrong with self-publishing?
What isn't?

Well it's good way to publish stuff that won't sell in bookshops, so you get more creative control because you're the one calling all the shots. Yes, it mostly results in people publishing trash, but I refuse to believe every self-published book is a 17 year old's romance manifesto or DnD campaign.

Personally I'm self-publishing it because I'm Uni so I'm not focused on profits at the moment, it's more of a discipline building exercise, being able to say I've published my own books. Who knows, if I do made money then it will look good for when I submit to traditional publishing firms.

Gregory Berrycone/10

What?

>The happiness is next to the peanut butter in isle 3.

>a spider
>has sex with him

>Are you high or something?
Wow, I didn't expect to have such great praise on my first go.
Could be good. Depends on execution.

>He thinks it's commendable to do drugs and not deplorable

Nice, would read

would read, think i'd have him just watch the opera house burn from the outside and have it end without explanation will probably steal

would read

>fantasy setting where old age turns people into murderous parasite monsters >protagonist is a traveling nurse who euthanizes the elderly
>her grim work has made her a cynical hedonist
>she teams up with a chill older nurse and an idealistic young doctor
>they collect live test subjects in order to research how to stop the parasite plague
>this brings down on them both the old-people-monsters and the vaguely authoritarian, mysterious "town council" in charge of the setting
>weird fantasy sex, violence, and a shitload of maternal and breastfeeding imagery follow

Every time you post this I tell you the same thing. It's a shit idea. Just fucking grow up, drop it, and move on to something else.

>bad things happen to people who won't touch my wang

>he thinks there's anything wrong with altering mindstates using chemicals

no u

>around 45k words
Hurm, mine is about the same. Well, good luck.

thanks for the encouragement bro

>protagonist is a fucking loser
>does nothing except play video games and look at his computer all day
>occasionally looks at a book
It's autobiographical

Fuck you, OP, I can never get past those tits

Veeky Forums I've got the Great American Novel, and I'll be damned if I'm going to share it with you. Mark my words. My initials are MDL, and expect it in 3-5 years.

>people that die have a small possibility of coming back to life with the addition of having a supernatural ability partially determined by how they died (something that could prevent their death)
>ability can only be used in moments of great stress, which gives it the name of "crisis retaliation"
> all of that is kept in the shadows for most of the general population
>there is a global organization that gathers those people for a good cause, which is being the main stopping force of any special person that decides to use their abilities for bad things
>main story follows the protagonist, who is part of that organization for years, but that realizes that there is something wrong with all of that
>After a wrong situation, the organization wants him dead, and at the same time he is confronted with a past lover, which was his cause of death for reasons he doesn't know
>he now wants to get away from it all, but knowing the organization won't stop until he is dead, he's forced to confront the boss of the country's branch to maybe put a stop on it
>when he meets the boss, confusion arises, as they reveal that they thought he was willingly working for his past lover, who was known to manipulate men to try and destroy the organization from the inside, because they killed her lover years ago when he tried to reveal their real intentions on eventual world domination
>protagonist feels used, as his own motives to start all of that weren't even his own to begin with
>kills the boss and let's his past lover take the position without thinking of the consequences, as he is tired of all of that and he really wants out

>supernatural
Dropped

>ancient Rome style world with magic and industrial revolution
>militant anarchist group trying to overthrow elites
>shadowy council descended from the country's founders is trying to take over government
>MC is an insomniac loser with a gay crush on his roommate who has a vow of celibacy
>gets chosen to a semi important government position because he's so incompetent and easy to blackmail
>his rival gets pissed and uses council to destroy almost all of the civilian leadership with magic
>suddenly he's put in charge of the interim gov since he's the only one left
>must find a way to deal with the shit storm and stop his rival or the anarchists from taking over
There's a lot more to it but that's the basics

Would read

I'm on track to getting it self published in december btw

>self-publishing
>Magic

>young man abducts well endowed gravure idol
>go on a road trip across the United States together
>she eats ice cream sundaes and stuff
>the end

I snuck into the theatre. The corridor was interminable, full of posters and squeaky chairs, mostly sub-par plays from the 60's. Eventually I found the main locker room, I entered it and hid in one of the lockers. Some faggot entered the room, probably one of the actors. He sat down started reading a script he found at the floor. While he reached out for the script I threw myself out ad knocked him out senseless. He fell down like a carrot on ice, I began slowly removing every article of clothing, revealing my erect 9.4 inch penis, all of a sudden some other faggot entered the room holding an hour glass-- only a paucity of sand was left-- so little time was left.

"I am the person who is directing the current play, and I demand what's transpiring in this confined area!" He shouted, while pointing at his sandals
"We're just rehersing" I said pensively while looking at his sandals
"But the janitor isn't even in this thing!" he cried.

I think I handle it pretty artfully, you have to tell a story or a poem to use magic in the story so it's more of an excuse for world building and tone/theme setting

>c.1,300 years from now
>Humanity has expanded across a small spec of the Milky Way - tens of thousands of stars
>No alien civilisations, no space-magic, no super-technology
>Humanity has been through the same kind of societal peaks and troughs it has faced on Earth
>The majority of the settled universe is made up of a patchwork of different 'countries', most bearing some cultural resemblance to their ancestors from Earth
>Around 2/3 of these are ruled semi-autonomously but as part of a pseudo-HRE, with Terra and it's posessions being the hegemon
>One of these countless realms is a rich mono-planetary oligarchic mercantile republic yes its full of pseudo-Italians
>The head of one of the ruling families has almost a dozen children
>The only one of importance is his youngest daughter
>She is a 15 year old judgemental, argumentative, ideologue
>He is sick of her shit
>He gives her one of her family's hundreds of galleys and tells her to take a grand tour and 'experience creation'
>She travels around the known universe, visiting different peoples of varying different cultures, with different ideas of everything from sexuality and religion to philosophy and politics to art and culture
>Most of her time is spent rationalising her disgust for other peoples' 'primitive' (as she views them) ways, arguing with foreigners on various topics and slowly learning her place within all things

There is no real over-arching plot, other than her self-development, as it is mainly a collection of acts based on particular points in her travels, within which lie stories. And yes, it's largely allegory for differing views on various issues presented through the eyes of cultures that have developed around one perspective, and the views of an opinionated pseud who sees things from a different point. Yes I am also a massive pseud and it's likely all rubbish.

We already have My Twisted World

Damn 50 shades imitators

sounds a lot like the kingkiller series

>genre
>space
>science fiction
>generic scifi terms for setting "terra"
>15 year old character
>class criticism without any substance that doesn't relate to the plot that shouldn't be in it

Don't write.

Posted this in an earlier thread, posting again

"Uskomuksista ja odotuksista" ("Of beliefs and expectations"), serie of stories happening during one warm autumn day in Helsinki
>First: A deeply religious and demented old man taking care of his paralyzed son, the tone is light and comical
>Second: A man is woken up hungover in the betonsuburbs by a talking hedgehog and they discuss their differences and lifechoices with the hedgehog coming on top in the discussion and in the end burying the man under leaves for winter as a man watches the scene from a street
>Third: Two men are are having extremely pseudo discussions, mostly comprised of texts of wiser men, but they also show creativeness by telling eachother stories in a café, until the other tells a story which has a story inside it which has another etc. until a story told is their reality, and after realizing that, the cafe goes quiet and they notice that all the people have gone away from the restaurant after which the other man walks alone to home
>Fourth: A con man considers what he has seen and done today (he sold fraud insurance to the jolly dementic of the beginning, saw a man buried by a hedgehog, people behaving abnormally) and decides to take a walk
>On his walk through the centrum of the city there is a huge traffic and a lot of people walking around hastily and looking worried, but it is strangely silent.
>A man is selling religious things (candels with Jesus etc.), but nobodies buying so the seller stops the con man for a chat.
>They discuss the happening and religion, showing that the "messenger of god" is a fraud too and the fraud also notices that the con man is not really an insurance man either.
>They take a walk to the Olympic stadium and note many more things happening around them, such as birds dying from flight and dropping down, making the fraud nervous.
>The frauds nervousness spreads to the con man, but he grows furious with the weakness that the fraud is showing and kills him by hitting his head with a metal pipe until it's pulp, then, calmly goes to Kaivopuisto, strips naked and goes to swim in the ocean.
>Fifth: A lonely and emotionless cashier gets off his work, gets drunk, harasses people that have been kind to him and goes to his home fortifying himself in by blocking the windows and doors with planks and furniture.
>Through the night he remembers times when he, in his private social games, won over other people and between puking and short sequences of sleep he grows increasingly cold and clinical about himself, his surroundings, things that are happening and things that have happened, building a certain cold nihilistic feel.
>When he wakes up, it is absolutely dark and he cannot tell what the time is and as he feels his way through the darkness he starts to notice that things aren't the way they used to be in his room. In the end he tears out the planks from the windows but everything is black and cold outside too, he can only see his reflection in the window

Would read

>World set in post-apocalyptic America
>Now is sectored off into magical regions
>Regions are literally living things, like one region is a everlasting storm, one has buildings growing from the ground, another is a giant pit of fire, they all have actual personalities and can think and sometimes communicate
>Main magical creature is coins, literal coins which can fly around and talk.
>Coins need to be Bound to a human to really influence the world, so the main nation of coins sends people over to the neighboring human country to Bind young people, meaning they share thoughts and powers
>Coins have different colors which dictate what kind of magic they posses, the closer to a pure/primary color the stronger
>Centuries ago, when the world was strong and unified, the strongest evil coins, including the strongest, the red coin, were bound to a fiery pit, which again is a literal living thing
>The Pit is slowly dying, and his coins are coming off as a result, polluting the world with super strong evil coins.
>The world is extremely divided and not capable of combating that, so it becomes morally right in some sense for these regions to battle so one can become a victor and unify everybody into a state where they can battle the evil coins and the red coin.
>Lots of political shenanigans like in GoT

>post-apocalyptic America
Dropped

I already changed that part, the important thing is that their are artifacts of a past society which can be assembled into guns and cars without mass production being a thing

You changed it in the last seven minutes?

>The only one of importance is his youngest daughter
>She is a 15 year old judgemental, argumentative, ideologue

make her beautiful, genius, everyone loves her, master of everything she tries, excels at hand to hand combat with no training, able with no effort to solve problems trained adults can't, master diplomat, master strategist
>but she doesn't know it
and you're guaranteed $1,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000

but just remember that all that money won't buy you a good, creative, interesting idea

Yes, because it isn't a part of the novel. There's no remnants of the society before, except for these interchangeable machine parts that litter parts of the world and a couple missile silos.

But you see, it is all a dream as the power of the coins comes from people's opinions on their colors.

>it's all a dream
dropped

It's not all a dream, that was a joke, an allegory if you will

I promise you my protagonist is nothing like Kvothe.

my story is about a mouse fairy who lives in the dimmension above space and time

>Guy says goodbye to his friends and family
>says he's been depressed for years
>something something

It's my suicide note

>all this sci-fi/post-apocalyptic/fantasy/genreshit

what happened?

It's fun to write when you're starting out.