Okay Veeky Forums so in English I had to write a freestyle poem so I decided to write the poem below. My English teacher is quite lenient so I know the cursing wont matter. Also I know its messy and unedited but I am not especially good and English and the messiness is kind of the point. Opinions?
Poetry
sorry its sideways
how do you write up and down like that?
i look autistic af now
what do you know? you know it's terrible too.
tho i'd've expected something a bit better from a high schooler. this reads more like an elementary schooler's -who knows a few more words than usual- homework.
very cringy, dont show to anybody.
what do you want to* know?
>this is considered acceptable for an 18 year old
Public education was a mistake.
not really. OP on the other hand....
end your misery ohpee
>18 years americans cannot write in cursive
Poor infantilized nation
English 7? What the fuck is that?
It's obvious the poem was written by a 12 year old in the seventh grade.
Probably 7th grade english
or a 17 year old in 7th grade
I'm kinda replying to everyone in general here. Yes I turned this in and yes I will probably get either a B or a C on this. That is sad but I'm not good at English and I really hate poetry. I wont get any bad criticism because this is normie English so it doesn't matter. Obviously public education is flawed and you don't have to try. How would you feel if I told you I am a senior in high school next year going to k-state on a scholarship for engineering. BTW I have an A in english
>BTW I have an A in english
Damn.....you showed us. Shut me right the hell up.
Is this a joke?
Sadly no
Well...in a way
I would laugh at you. K state is a shit school.
You said you would have no metaphors yet you say the poem is garbage. Fail/10
That was intentional and if you say K-state is a shit school I don't really care I expected someone to say something like that anyways. Why is it a shit school btw what experience do you have there... none?
What experience does anybody have there? None.
rekt
You sound like an anti-intellectual ass with a serious Dunning-Kruger effect.
My opinion is that you should stop dicking around and write a real poem. Jesus, writing bad poetry is one of the few things teenagers can actually do reliably. If you can't, write a mechanical poem or two and make your teacher earn his pay. Look, here's some I did for school. For bonus points, don't tell them they were generated randomly and watch people try to analyze them.
Mechanical Poems
(Method- cut text into strips, tore strips up in handfuls, allowed cat to play with them. Wrote down whatever I could read at the end of that process, then re-stirred)
1.
language in detail is true what legs
as an extrication the terms of a
poem as primarily positions but the willing to allow what of iro tail
the cal- po find uses illogical souls
symbols
2.
“Telescoped” statement, we
it is from of a very darkness
poet: Irony in this general loose
philosopher tial celebrat for ulation
I ewed meaning but as a “proved”
of the the ideal language wor pect
away from
3.
rest in powerful sort in
water “Canonization” as is a tr
snake legs even forward formulation
willing to allow The should be
a logical proof
pressure of the
4.
degree far beyond true of thi
tage’ show of logic
as primarily ploys it to ov
proof is found a pair
his staple one
and there
5.
precisely Tears
speare of the but
dislocate language into mean ical proof
approaching “shadowing”
word as th the I maintain
need to be
the ordering of the
6.
not as a discrete particle
is the child who is the be
as well man revived interest
ironic larger wholes of poetry
figures like
snow of logic
Cross-out Poems
(Method- crossed out whatever bored me)
1.
immersed
in the pool of water, warped and bent the
not logical
a clean image
images
elaborate souls
2.
“Idle Tears”
a profound thrust
exerted and played one against the other. a point of view—
the child who is
a kind of darkness—
shadowy growth into
a prison.
3.
The symbols do
not change aspire
warped into new meanings
dislocate d consider
the relationship nexus
4.
played the light
proceeds extrication but
abstract ?
pure in advanc ing
stand contain
constant