ITT: we share our story ideas and anons tell us whether it's worth pursuing or not

>MC is a high school teacher
>dating/fucking one of his former, graduated students
>she lives with him, it's over the summer
>he likes it at first
>then he gets depressed about it, starts acting weird, having a huge moral internal struggle
>she doesn't want it to end
dunno how to end it tho

Would read. Probably would like it (depending on the quality of your prose). Would definitely hate you for that shitty ending.

>some dude creates the Heavens and the Earth etc
>he has a son, born from a virgin lady
>some stuff happens
>son dies, gets nailed to a cross
r8

Originally he was going to kill himself but I figured that'd be way too cliche. I don't want any real resolution, I just want something beyond his control to force him out of the vicious circle. The last image I have in my head is him carrying his sister on the other end of the Bay Bridge, looking back and seeing the city on fire

This plot is such modernist garbage.

This really made me think

Figured it was garbo
Oh well

There's a machine which can redesign the universe to an optimal state and for a reason unexplained it can be activated only by the self-willing sacrifice of the nihilistic protagonist's life.

> MC, early 30s, returns to the town he grew up in after a time with a lot of money, buys a nice house on a hill with a view, lives a normative male fantasy.
> He finds the city changed and it makes him melancholic.
> Remembers what it was like when he was a grad student, had a stable relationship with nice, wholesome girl since they were in high school, everything was perfect.
> His startup started taking off, he was travelling, wasn't in town often.
> He remembers the efforts they made to keep the relationship together, more melancholy.
> He moves to San Fran, works his ass off, makes money.
> The he sells the company and moves back to town rich.
I think at this point he should run into the ex.
> Probably expensive coffee to go, walking around the city together. More places described as irrevocably changed.
> Ex has a husband, two kids, white picket fence sort of thing. He seems extremely stable and completely boring.
> She seems to be missing the sensitive, smart, MC of back in the day.
> Like the city, MC has been gentrified and lost his character, he's a slick Silicon Valley huckster now.
> They part, MC goes back to his hollow life of pulling hot 22 year olds on Tinder. Ex goes back to boring family life.

No resolution, they just never see each other again.

The whole narrative should happen while he's wandering around the street and commenting on how the city has changed, gentrified, lost its character. I want it to be mostly just sketches of the background, a lot of focus on the physical setting contrasted to how it used to be when MC was young.

It would be set in late fall when the city I have in mind is most like itself. Bitter, cold rains all the time maybe some snow towards the end of the book.

I'm not sure how much exposition should go into chat with Ex and how much into solo MC wandering.

Would read if you toned down some of the meme parts, but I also love stories that don't really have a whole resolution

>loud mouthed reality tv star
>decides to run for president
>he actually wins

protagonist awake in cavern
cross the path of a nomad tribe that live in the caverns
he try to speak to the tribe but he doesn't manage to speak correctly and doesn't seem satisfied with the words that come out of his mouth
the tribe members hunt animals and use their skin as materials(toys, clothing, music instrument)
protagonist try to build small objects after watching the nomads but everything become jangled and twist in his hands the outcome is never satisfying and variant.
the nomads do not eat the animals for their meat isn't comestible, instead they boil the animal blood and drink it
hilarity ensue

also want to write about death rituals in eskimo communities with old peoples killing themselves once the tribe reach a particular number, very interesting stuff

Thanks. I've been sitting on this for a while.

I agree with you on stories with no resolutions. They seem so artificial to me. IRL people just carry on with their lives, slightly changed, there's never any resolution.

Here's the first page I wrote a few months ago, if you're interested. I think I'm going to get back into it and start writing again

Any feedback is really appreciated!

Both are interesting. Good prose can carry these a long way.

Oh, you know, the two protagonists go out into the world and meet some people much like the ones you'll find in real life, and go through some common yet troubling social interactions that make me feel like we live in a society where nobody has any reason to care about one another anymore.

Typical litfic garbage, I guess.

For every good there's a bad but not terrible

>tfw you'll never grow massive and fuck the opening to the San Francisco Bay with your massive 28214.643621889933' in circumference dong

actually did the math on that one

It's interesting. It's very ornate and without reading more it's hard to say whether that's good or bad. It's definitely a style, but without reading more it's hard to say more about it.

You use the word "all" too much.

I didn't even notice all those alls. I'll take out the ones I don't need. Thanks!

Setting: small mountain village somewhere in the Balkans
Time period: 1900
A bunch of kids are living their day to day life. The village they live in is secluded so it's full of interesting folklore and the world outside is chock full of dragon's nests and nigger's treasure hoard. One of the main cast is kidnapped by a vampire but the rest of the cast is too scared to seek help. There's no vampires though, a bunch of gypsies took her.

Think Stranger Things but in the 1890s and instead of pop culture we have folklore and there's probably no supernatural things. Am I wasting my time?

>short story where a man plans a camping trip with the pretext of killing himself focused mainly on the meticulous details of his planning
>ends with him chickening out

the struggles and triumphs of Boo Widdly, in his quest to become the world's first crack cocaine addicted Olympic triathelete

The monsters should turn out to be nice in the end please

I could see myself enjoying this, however I agree with that the ending isn't very good. How would he react to the documentary actually being finished and released?

Have you seen The Witch (2015)? I'd recommend it.

That's good dude. Would read.

I'd read that if it was a short story but I imagine it'd get tiring if it was full novel length.

I'd read the fuck out of that but you'd better have the right writing voice for it. Witty but not ridiculous.

I was thinking there are no monsters at all but that'd be a nice spin too.

Hey that's right up my alley. I'll probably watch it tomorrow, thanks!

That's the thing, I don't want the film to be released. I want all of the stored footage and the filmmaker to be lost in the fire, that's the only way I see the MC escaping the cycle the documentary ends up putting him in

Like Abed in that episode of Community right? xD

It's good though. I'm getting Birdman vibes from it .

Oh gotcha, that actually makes perfect sense. Yeah, I could definitely see something like that being enjoyable.
Also, mah nigga

2/ is good and would probably receive more praise if it were to be published but I'd be more interested in 1/ if you were to tweak the ending. Suicide is a very cop-out of an ending and having a desperate protagonists can really give wind to a plot's sails. Following this man-turned-psychopath should have me hooked and to just kill him off like that seems like a waste.

If this thread is alive by tomorrow I'll do everyone. If you post it I'll give my opinions on it. I've been told I have a shit taste though.

i like this, but I'd only read it if you included a part about chopping the end of every boys penis off

sounds like a bit of an undertaking, have you considered collaborating?

You should 100% write both. I'd say 1 interests me more, though. And don't feel like you have to abide by your outline -- you'll end up writing against yourself.

Hope they come out well.

Welll yes, I get that you want to make something he can't control get him out of his circle. However my problem with the whole city on fire is that it's just way to unrealistic and a bit extreme.
I like it so far. Seems like you have a style and it's an entertaining one. I would like to read how you write something human related. Do you have more user?

Well, here's page two. I think most of it should be rewritten

Agree. Seems like some of the details you provide don't really add anything other than filler. Also seems like you did not put in same amout pf effort into this page. I think you should polish it. You have some talent user. Keep writing and you could be onto something. Good luck user

Thank you! That means a lot to hear
Yeah definitely not as much effort. I think if I can keep up the same tone from the first page it should be a lot better

>A group of mature, civil servant-like friends have a monthly meeting at someone's home. Back in their uni years, which transcurred during something similar to May 68, they had a communist terrorist cell which didn't really ever manage anything. Maybe they almost killed some random police officer but chickened out or something. Now they all (except one of them) kinda want to reconstitute the cell and do some terrorist act, maybe the assassination of one of them who happens to have grown up to have a job in the ministry of policing or something. Every night they meet they plan on doing the terrorist act but they never do.
>some rich preppy communist young woman (maybe during the 70's in a Baader-Meinhof-like organization, maybe during the Spanish civil war) engaged with an equally young male communist lives in an ambient of revolutionary efervescence, fantasizes of her and her boyfriend being the vanguard for the proletariat and shit. They both have a lawful, asexuated Eumaeus-like companion/servant from the party/sindicate/organization, who may be a chauffeur or whatever. One night, as she fucks with her male partner, they find out that lawful proletarian servant looking through a hole in the wall and masturbating, she tries to cover her nakedness and her boyfriend leaves the room running after the masturbator.

I have an idea where a man decides to write about his life for his child in the form of music. Knowing the child won't just listen to stories about himself, he then creates 7 seven constellations in which he creates 8 stories (acts/albums)(7 different stories, and an epilogue revealing what the bigger picture of the stories was). Though each story follows a different character, several major themes and metaphors carry throughout the entirety of each story to ground them to each other. Each characters past and future will coincide with each other characters past and future, yet with entirely different settings, plots, stories. The 8th story reveals a secondary author who is different than the narrator and primary author for the rest of the stories.

I don't want to go too much in detail because I don't trust Veeky Forums, but I think it'll be a great story/series of stories.

how about a book about a NEET who's trying to escape from nihilism but he doesn't know how

cant tell if im faded or youre just fucking nuts

Does he find God in the end? Or does it end badly?

The primary theme is dream-states and the stories all work on pushing the other major theme of how cataclysmic or pivotal events in people lives 'kill' them and 'rebirth' them as a new person.

Done to death.

Donnie Darko

bump

Got a few ideas in my head of things I'd want to write. Mainly fantasy and scifi settings.

Fantasy I was thinking about making the MC an Orc or Centaur leaving/forced from his tribe/clan on a journey to find true strength, meeting various fantasy races along the way and learning about what makes that race strong.

After MC learns what he can he returns to his tribe/clan and forces them to submit to him and then he sets out to conquer the rest of his people and then the world.

I'm set on MC being an Orc/Centaur since they're the stereotypical strong guy race in fantasy and I'm sick to death of modern fantasy MCs being nothing but humans or elves.

For scifi I was thinking about either a series about space pirates doing space pirate things, raiding trade convoys. Pissing off authorities and partying all night long.

Or some sort of galactic treasure hunter travelling the cosmos and finding relics from ancient civilizations, pre-sentient species, and other things. Like space Indiana Jones.

Either one of these ideas would be fun to write.

I'm honestly sick of modern scifi novels since they all seem to be Military Scifi where its humans vs some incomprehensible alien force where we're outmatched in all ways but we're still winning somehow!

Just some basic ideas atm. Currently chiseling out the details on the fantasy one though.

>MC is pet dog
>Owner is mentally fucked up loser
>Dog thinks why he's such a little bitch
>Thinks more on that idea
>Damn, humans are fucking autistic
>As plot continues, owner has rises and falls
>Social reject owner eventually an hero
>Dog goes to shelter
>Adopted by large family
>Bullshit still goes on with new owners
>Questions human behavior
>Story ends with shit-tier 2deep4u lesson

>book is split into three parts
>first part is typical romance of this guy pining for this girl because she's different and quirky
>first part ends with him getting sick of her shit and killing her
>second part is a few months later
>he's covered up the murder as well as he can, fucking her grief ridden best friend and has generally become a paranoid chain smoking wreck
>second part ends with him being caught
>third part is set decades later, he's done his time for the murder, had a wife, had kids, divorced, lived his whole life
>not sure how to fully round it off

obviously i want to bring it back to the girl but i don't want to do some cliche shit like him breaking down in front of her grave

>College student's grandpa died
>Grandpa deposits a copy of himself into a virtual universe/simulation program so that she can visit him
>She does.
>The virtual reality allows the copies to look like and act like they did when they were young or old, whenever they felt they were best
>She finds out that grandpa is not as he seemed
>She meets old people who are amazing and interesting that she'd never have bothered with because they were old
>She falls in love with one of the simulations who is just data and realizes it wouldn't ever work.
>She feels odd about her grandpa who she was always close to
>She leaves the virtual reality alone, wondering if she should have left the past in the past.

Oh shit
Didn't watch that movie yet

>tfw no one tell you whether your post is shit or not so you have to assume it's shit and boring.

>scientists discover dinosaurs in the centre of the earth.
>gets turned in to an atraction park for rich turists.

>he thinks i'm gonna post my million dollar idea so anons can steal it.
HA. How naive do you think i am.

Perfect 5-10 page short story material, don't go too long though, keep it short and sweet

If you had the right voice this would be a great 45 page short story

as a short story yeah i can see this being alright

Hey man, I really like your idea and the page you posted. If you're looking for some feedback, I can give you my throwaway email. It might take me a while to reply cuz I don't check it at all often.

>illneverusethisagain62
>at
>gmail
>dotcom

I'd like to see how you handle the more active, character-based scenes, and if they're as good as your handling of setting in the extract you posted.

i like the concept, i love how you write but i completely hate the sound of that ending

>MC got sold down the river in his childhood, is now a pushover beta porn addict who undereats so has low test, is socially awkward, depressed and anxious
>MC tries and fails to do the things other kids his age are doing easily
>MC tries many ways to become better, to become a man, reads books, does gym, sees many specialists, therapists, practitioners and doctors, but nothing seems to work and he wastes a lot of money and time and hits rock bottom
>MC, by slim chance, discovers humble biologist online who highlights the need for high calorie, high sugar, high protein nutrition as a prerequisite to health
>said biologist teaches extreme easy and cheap ways to health and vitality and preventing disease
>MC found hope in this one geezer who's not asking for money, who's not asking for anything, who shares his knowledge for the good of all beings
>MC starts eating tons of food, doing some simple things taught by biologist. doesn't get hopes up, but just does it every day.
>surprisingly, many days in, there is change. after years of failure, there is change.
>MC quits porn whereas before this was impossible
>MC's anxiety is gone, his whole personality changes
>MC's dopamine and testosterone soar over old baseline levels
>MC returns to the world with love in his heart but also passion and anger
>MC shocks people who knew him, uses newfound ambition to do some shit a la Limitless film
>some other stuff happens, maybe he ends up in a desert car chase like a Breaking Bad scene
>dreams of MC would play into narrative, and influence his actions throughout
>eventual love interest for MC, akin to Oldboy where Oh Dae-su asks himself "If my lover had met me before my journey, would she even have liked me?"

forgot to put after MC tries many ways to become better but nothing works
>MC becomes a hermit, cuts contact with loved ones and friends, feels hopeless, then finds biologist
>the ensuing months are an isolated period of healing and regeneration before MC returns to world

Please guise somebody validate me

I feel ya man. Not good enough to rate well, and apparently to be rated either.

It feels like it's missing a third act. As it stands it reads like the whole purpose is to shill this diet.

First one could be fun. Reminds me of Four Lions.

Second one is gibberish. Nothing seems to relate to anything else. Make it 1000+ pages and Veeky Forums will have a meme tetralogy.

>ITT: we let people steal our ideas

That is a primer for the story I would write. Third act would be the adventure, with a love interest and another conflict being overcome.

and it's not really a diet that can be shilled. MC eats lots of nutritious food to restore himself...

A robot crash lands on a planet still stuck in medieval times joins up with a girl who just goes from tourney to tourney, eventually gaining attention from a lord who wants them both in his army after seeing how invincible it is.

sounds like it could have a nice sense of adventure, nothing groundbreaking though desu

I wanted to try something with UFOs, and Ayys in a fantasy setting. It seems like it has potential.

Collection of myths from the post apocalypse told with the framing device of people sitting around a fire out in the wastes

> finish English literature degree
> get a job as a night shift security guard
> read
> write
> develop minor addiction to prescription opiates
> regularly catch venereal diseases from fucking prostitutes raw.

Short story
>A disturbed man is pursued by three phantasmal bounty hunters
>One hunter is blind, the second is deaf, and the third is mute. The first wears a blindfold, the second wears headphones, and the third is gagged
>Surreal spooky shit happens

Medieval monk goes mad and believes he is the king of Spain

Had an idea where a man spends his days scouring a wasteland many years after the world broke into war and entered a state of apocalypse. Any group he joins and anybody friendly he encounters, he always says the same thing: that he's searching for the regalia his father promised him he'd find, left for him in the wastes. He spends the story searching over the areas of the wastes his father explored- learning of his family's involvement in the war, how different life in the wastes is when you're alone, and his attempts to find love and family. All in the end, will be revealed that the regalia isn't really an heirloom, but a way of thinking and seeing the world by experiencing it. The way that influences him and changes him, he wears it everyday.

There was more to it, but I dropped for a much more in depth and involved story idea.

Based in South Europe, 600 or so years after a CME that knocks out all electric devices, society returns to the dark ages and the plot is a struggling christian empire trying to defend europe from an arab invasion, and its all horses and swords and shit

At a (yet undecided) European court of 1604 a telescope is commissioned to observe Kepler's supernova which occurred that year

think pillars of the earth but with a telescope instead of a cathedral

>the real treasure was inside you all along xD

I start a nerd holocaust on the internet that will squash all of their hopes and dreams and ruin their sense of community.

hi irvine welsh

alright guys, this is my first idea so be gentle

>MC is a redneck from rural Alberta
>him and his brothers/cousins have been making a living by illegally tapping into oil pipelines and selling stolen oil to their little backwoods bog
>MC isn't the brightest, easily manipulated
>goes to tap a pipe one day
>a group of environmental terrorists are also there ready to break it down
>they see his tools, call him a vigilante hero
>decide to use him as their poster-boy for activism, offer him a top position, he buys into it
>MC gets propelled into infamy with the news calling him a criminal and the terrorists praising him as a hero

Not really sure where it's gonna go from there. I want to have some kind of satire on current activism and 'slacktivism' type stuff.

no one would believe it, though. Try to write something more realistic.

I'm writing something very similar to Le Horla

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Man wanders around wilderness a long time, gradually loses notion of symbols/language, then loses 'self'. After ego death he no longer recognizes boundaries between own body and landscape: rendered being of pure sensorial/empathic input.
Some plot point would be about bowel movements only possible when sympathetically linked to volcano eruptions, exhaustion as entropy etc

proposed title: The Atrocity Exhibition pt.2: the Slothrop Chronicles

Cyberpunk caper wherein a common criminal steals a macguffin - either a phenomenally advanced power source or a "universal transceiver"

Setting is a space station colony under lockdown in the throws of civil unrest.

He is mistaken for the hero of the revolution - he is not.

A comedy of errors occurs culminating in a choice between profit and principal.

Fantasy novel set in a fictional version of the Napoleonic era
Three nations reconstructing after a great war: a kingdom with an Anglo culture, a kingdom with a Latin culture, and a kingdom with a Scandi culture

Its still essentially a medieval world but the discovery of a ridiculously powerful fuel source which they still don't quite understand, referred to as 'blue rock'
This shit causes the skies to start to darken and all the flowers to grow withered and warped

Different POVs: the main ones being an anorexic teenage princess learning how to rule in place of her alcoholic father, a prince starting a civil war against his father, a boy king struggling against a corrupt politician, an immigrant woman fleeing a warzone, and an explorer discovering new lands.

The first book would be the build up to a great war, each of the nations heading that way due to the actions of the well meaning but inexperienced protagonists.

principle, throes

it sounds like the ensuing comedy of errors is where the story is supposed to go; tell us your idea for that

which is why it isnt written