ITT: Share your story ideas and people tell you whether or not they're good enough to go forward with

ITT: Share your story ideas and people tell you whether or not they're good enough to go forward with

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Dilapidated virgin keeps diary, posts it online, kills himself.

A 2 act novel about a bunch of soldiers of the División Azul in WW2 (Spaniard volunteers fighting for the Nazis) (1st act) and how their acts affected people in different countries (Spain, France and Germany) (2nd act)

A zombie apocalypse overcomes a small Amish community and one Amish man saves the town with his wits, his bible, and his shotgun

Sounds interesting user.

Fine, have it. I wrote a hundred pages of a projected one-thousand, but I don't think I can finish it.

The premise: A Hollywood film director convinces Sam Harris, the public intellectual, that he's the only living person who can do justice to the role of Richard Nixon in the director's upcoming biopic. Harris initially resists the idea, but over weeks of persuasion, he comes around and becomes convinced that he will go down in acting history. What he doesn't know is that the director intends only to humiliate him.

Meme
Would read
Meme
Meme but would read

In 2030, Due to the shark-finning industry going global, every single species of shark is declared basically extinct. Oceans now have more nets in them than fish, and a single shark fin is worth hundreds of thousands due to non-existent numbers.

However something terrible is going on. Rumors of a colossal Great White surfaces, one who has been destroying netting boats and killing fishermen. Nobody is terrified by this, and instead, causes more people to flock to the ocean in hopes of bagging this million dollar mark.

Cue in Simon Reggar, an edgy sea-faring ecowarrior who uses unsavory tactics to sink fishing boats and sabotage the finning industry. As this new Megalodon surfaces during one of his attacks, he discovers something strange about this giant shark: It shows signs of intelligence, is intentionally sinking fishing vessels out of revenge, not hunger, and it has a sense of camaraderie with him.

So he does what any normal person does when a shark starts chilling out with him: he straps a home-made saddle to it and starts raiding the shit out of finning boats with it.

In his pursuit to discover more about his new shark, he is joined by his Brother, a reluctant Coast Guard veteran sent to put a stop to his terrorism, an ichthyologist who believes she can save the shark species by saving this one individual, and a sea hermit who believes that this shark is the Anger of the Ocean itself.

>1
American nan meets African girl in Parisian cafe and has a summer affair. Depression comes around and he gets sent back because of funding cuts at his paper. Goes on back to Paris after WW2 to find out girl had a child that was killed for being mulatto along with the girl.

>2
Kid travels with family on vacation having a grand old time with a bunch of different girls all over their travels. The whole time he's just trying to escape his guilt of having hurt his stateside girlfriend. The irony of his escapades being an escape for his adulterous guilt consumes him.

>3
Short story collection about various patients in a mental hospital in a similar vein to Dubliners.

>4
Spy novel about the recent events in Korea where CIA has multiple agents in various degrees of secrecy. MC is an agent simply on vacation but gets pulled in regardless.

A few others but how do people feel about any of these.

Setting is 1300s England, in the time of the Black Death, and follows a band of highwaymen as they loot and pillage and torch and rapine their way through the countryside.
The main character would not exactly sit right with these events but participate in them all the same, for fellowship and for safety and for security. Eventually, they will be hunted down one by one until the MC is captured by the sheriff of the area they're in, where he's thrown in a cell awaiting execution. He sees the error of his ways, and is forgiven by a monk or an abbot who sees him in his last night on earth; they have a conversation about God and the infinite and what it means to be a good man.
He goes to the gallows a free man, penitent for his crimes and regretful for the things he's done and the lives he has ruined but secure in the knowledge that he will be forgiven in the next life and that something greater than himself will be there to judge the weight of his contrition, as his contrition is not false.

this story involves the life of a 32 year old manchild whose whole life has revolved around his mother, that is, until the day she dies, leaving both him and his mother's corpse alone at home as the manchild tries to figure out what to do (think of r9k)

1 is good if heavy handed
2 is not so good
3 is great
4 sounds like genre fiction trash
2/4 ain't bad though
Would read

Would read 1 if you commit to that typo

It will be a 5-10 pages long, Dubliners-like, story. During the Spanish Civil War, a young girl who has an important position in the Communist Party while being the daughter of a prominent antifascist general, moves to Madrid in order to do some propaganda-related stuff for the party. There she lives with his boyfriend, who I think will be a soviet comisar (there were tons of these suckaz during the Spanish War). They both have a chauffeur, also a member of the Communist Party. One night or day, while the couple is about to have sex, they found out the chauffeur voyeouring on them and masturbating. The story ends with the girl covering her tits with the sheets and her boyfriend running after the chauffeur.

Sounds like a lot of pointless heavy background for a very shallow situation

My story idea is a murder case (Zadorov) that took place in Israel more than a decade ago. It was so wild, so unbelievable it should have been an HBO series instead of that shit The Night Of pointless show, but it'll never be dramatized because reality truly far surpasses anything you could make in fiction.

lol that would definitely change the story around

Well, to be fair I did say at the start #4 was a spy novel. I had the same feelings about #1 as well.

Thank you. Any other people care to comment on mine?

Could be decent but really could just plod along and feel preachy.

Could be crap or good.

That's just dumb.

Not heavy at all for me desu. Any spanish reader would easily recognize this kind of situation. Now, it's true that I'll have to give the right amount of protagonism to the relationship between the couple and the chauffeur. The context won't be futile since I intend the story to be kind of a fable about the dumb mythification of proletariat.

You should roll with 3 desu

>communists
>have a chauffeur
Really makes me think

single confused guy in his twenties gets paid a visit by a stranger who doesn't say a word but somehow finds his way to the guy's living room. He doesn't do anything but sit there silently. The guy is even more confused now and doesn't know what to do.

Could work for a short story but I can't imagine a whole novel.

Alright, Veeky Forums. I know this isn't usually your kind of thing, but hear me out.

I'm a gay man, and I've always loved reading about Henry the 8th. But, as a gay man, I've often found it difficult to find my way into the story. I've thought long and hard about it, and I've come to the decision that I'm going to write a play, that allows a man like me to better cross the horizon between then and now.

I'm going to queer Henry the 8th.

You might argue that it's unethical to tamper with history like this, and change things, but that's what Shakespeare did. And who's to say what I write about in my play didn't happen?

It's to be a five-act tragedy, called The Tragedy of Henry and Thomas (Working title; hopefully I'll think of something better.) It concerns an illicit love affair between Henry and his councilor, the writer of Utopia, which ends, tragically, due to Henry's denial, in his lover's beheading.

It will re-imagine Henry's relationship with his wives as being that of a deeply-closeted gay man, deeply unsatisfied in his marriages, until he meets Thomas. His feelings for Thomas are initially just those of a friend. But as he gets to know his wit, his intelligence, his staunch and immovable principles, this feeling grows, slowly enough for the king not to notice, into an great and confusing passion.

I can predict what you guys will say, but it's a very personal project for me. I don't care if people read it, let a lone like it. I just want to provide myself and others like me with an opening into this period. And a queer rendition of the story is the only way I can see of doing that.

I've only got the very beginning finished and I'll post that if people show interest

A collection of short stories revolving around the different people who visit this website. A glimpse into the life of a /pol/ user. A peek into what the average Veeky Forums lurker does. The inner workings of a robot's mind.

The son of an alcoholic, abusive lighthouse keeper fantasises about extinguishing the torch during a tumultuous storm, after becoming increasingly convinced that his father blames him for the death of his mother during childbirth. The narrative develops through three perspectives: the father, the son, and a social worker who worries about the boy but becomes emotionally entangled with the father and struggles to remain impartial

Literally the worst thing I've read in a while
Women might like it but what does that say about it
Want to read and hope I can when/if you finish
Sounds boring desu

I like it

A guy gets visited by a super intelligent alien life form, in human form, one night and gets asked if he would like to explore the cosmos.

High School girls tries to collect cum from every male of the student body

working title: Cum Laude

I was that girl in hs

The Odyssey but retold in the style of one of those high school animes

me 2. It's an autobiography.

Dude just hear me out.

Since you got trips, I'll post the opening.

It's kind of in medea res. Henry has been mulling over his confusion regarding his feelings towards Thomas More, when suddenly he realizes the nature of his attraction to the councilor.

Here goes:

Act One. Scene One

[London. The King’s Chambers. Night]

The King sits alone and deep in thought at a table. The sound of rain pelting the window is heard.

All of a sudden, as if hearing a shot, Henry startles, coming to a sudden realization. His eyes are wide and he is shaking with disbelief. He rises to his feet, knocking over a wine-jug as he stands. It pours across the stone floor, as he says:

HENRY:
>Holy… I want More.

You should call it "My Diary Desu"

Make this into a tragicomedy and I'm sold

How2Save a species with only 1? Don't you need a breeding pair? Or will cloning do the trick?

2 sounds like it could be a decent porno, if the kid is 18+.

Ive finished r9k's. Maybe I'll do g's next.

Post r9k's this sounds funny

There are plenty of H8 stories already. Surely there must be some other ruler in history whose life was similar but is not as well known.

"Six Veeky Forums'ers in search of an author"

Like a modern day Mobby Dick with a twist.

:)

I had cloning in mind

Yeah I know it could be dumb and preachy if I'm or subtle enough (which I have problems with I think) but I'm going to try and make it as subtle as possible so it doesn't come off as preachy and memetastic "dude he like miraculously found god at the end and it's all okay", I want to capture the Raskalnikov feels of Crime and Punishment almost but have the MC be less of a dick in the beginning.

Read

Isn't there a movie about this? With Terrence Stamp

Serial hospital procedural set in the distant future.

1. An elderly woman comes in with a rare form of dementia where she's essentially unstuck in time. (i.e. stuck five years in the past, suddenly having the mind of herself from 40 years ago, giving out next week's headlines, doubts whether her persona at the hospital is her "genuine" self.)

2. Highly religious space pacifist is forcibly impregnated by criminals with an alien egg sac for spare organs. Tries to convince doctors to let him go through the (definitely lethal) pregnancy.

3. Murders are being committed by robots designed to take the fall for their creators crimes. The doctors autopsy bodies and examine the robots themselves to find the perpetrators.

Mother died today

As requested. It's not great but it was fun to write.

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Space pirates take down enormous space freighters and physically revel in the mindbogglingly vast quantities of bulk goods they acquire- seas of coffee and grain, forests of rugs and silks, mountains of soda cans and potato chip bags

>genrelit

Actually I was thinking about making it a picture book

Damn man that was depressing

It's a common extreme.

A clandestine nightclub located in a mansion of a wealthy neighbourhood that is home of a drug cartel/Dyonisian cult involved in sacrifice, pedophilia, and may possibly hold existencially horrendous connections to a higher power. It is told from the perspective of a romantic relationship between two very self destructive teenagers who are regulars at the club. There is also the leader of the cartel, an old man, who may or may not be a manifestation of the character's hatred towards each other and themselves.

1920s lovecraftian xfiles

wew

If done properly it could be entertaining and scary. Need more details to know. On the other hand, its been done, so git gud faggot.

Been done where?

Lovecraft himself wrote from the point of view of detectives in his Mythos. Im assuming you want to give it an action/thriller twist, instead of it being pure existential horror, which would be at least a sort of original angle. Also, everything has been done. At this point in history there isn't one thing you can think of that hasn't been written and published.

First one (already posted in another thread but still):
>Steady but boring young man in 80s France suddenly suffers from insomnia. He finds out he can only fall asleep in movie theaters.

Second one:
>Contemporary France, coast of Brittany. A young man becomes the new lighthouse keeper in one of the last lighthouse in activity. One night, a girl, far away on the coast, talks to him through morse code, with a flashlight. They talk like this for months, never seeing each other, and fall in love.

I really like that one. Write it.

Please describe

How does he know it's a girl if he never sees her

She tells him. (No, she's not lying. Even if she/he does, that's not the point.)

A hobbo who's part of some underground assassination-esque order that works for the government(/ the higher/highest bidder).

He has to deal with abandoning his former life (w/ wife and child), and not biting his employer's hand(s).

A family of golden retrievers makes pancakes

I can see why this can be a good book.

But, for me, it would have to become political (obviously, right) and racial. You prepared for that?

Aging detective reflects on his relationship with his dead daughter after a group of preteen girls become the main suspects in a murder investigation

That vaguely reminds me of The Secret History

If you haven't read it, you should

I don't know if your premise would be good or not. I don't really like it, but it reminds me of something I do like.

Neither one sounds that interesting. Could still be good though. It's hard to judge based on a premise.

Write about a different historical ruler. Henry VIII is overdone

Ideally, make up your own ruler

The premise is okay but the parentheses and the word 'hobbo' make me question your ability to write it

Once upon a time in a place not so far away. There lived a litlle boy and his parrents.
The little boy was a happy young lad who had never lost anything and was ingnorant of the world outside home. His parrents always said: "Don't you go outside of that door, there are evil things there, it's not a place for young boy like you."
But then when the years passed and the boy, mommy's little angel and daddy's proudnes grew a litlle bit and got curious of whats beyond the forsaken door.
Well that little bit bigger boy asked about it from his daddy but he always smiled and said: "Maybe when you're a little older." so the boy wouldn't bother him anymore and as a dad he could carry on reading the news and watching sports.
But then one night after few years, that already curious young man got an sudden but strong feeling perhaps even an urge or need or something like that And did what he had never done before, he disobeyd his parrents and opened the door and ran into the night.

The rise and fall of an A.I. overlord.

>The premise is okay but the parentheses and the word 'hobbo' make me question your ability to write it


I just wanted to make it short.

The protagonist works for the gov, he does other small jobs for private businesses, sometimes interests clash.

He used to have an established life, in an important profession to such a small country with a wife and son, but got fucked and his only reprieve came in the form of some gov assassination invitation.

"Hobbos" is also called something different in my country, but you understood the premise more, knowing what the protagonist is supposed to be.

why and how does it fall?

What do you mean by "meme?" Do you mean "cliche?"

The overlord falls by having its empire be mercilessly attack by an ominous enemy of the overlord's making.

>hobbo

the last one is the only one that sounds like it could be a coherent story.

I like it, write it.

>First one
I can see why this can be interesting, so don't make it mundane. Doesn't have to be a long story as long as the twist works out.

>second one
sounds boring but then again I don't have a pallet for romances

>that bubble boy movie and AOT/SNK in one

yes, user. In my attempt to connect with the american crowd I forgot there are other nationalities here.

So yeah, he's a vagrant. My apologies.

>basically extinct
stopped reading there

>
Dam

Lol youre a fucking idiot
>hobbo

I had this idea for this story, I guess you guys should tell me if it sucks or not. It's about a wealthy American who goes abroad for University at Cambridge and falls in love with a girl. After he graduates he asks her to come with him to the US, but she doesn't want to leave so they break up.

The story itself starts four or five years later when he becomes an officer in the US Army Air Forces during WWII and gets stationed at one of the air bases in Cambridgeshire to find she still lives there and is married to an English (both in nationality and studies) Professor turned Royal Navy Officer.

I don't really know what's going to happen yet, but I have an idea of the themes and general layout.

Sounds boring and unoriginal. Then again, it could be good, but it mostly sounds boring and unoriginal.

Could be airport bookstore garbage or true litkino depending on your writing

First one piqued my interest, sounds somewhat absurd but in an interesting way. I'd read it.
Second one I really like, I feel like it could play out in a variety of moods.

My idea that was floating around, not taking it too seriously DESU:
>Old, crippled man withers away in an asylum. Every night he sleeps, they find someone in the asylum disappears. Man cannot remember his dreams, but does remember one thing: if he is killed, everyone stops existing.

yeah my hope is that it is either really good or nicholas sparks-tier, either way I'm happy

A scavenger turned smuggler realizes her latest cargo contains the most dangerous weapon in the galaxy. Now, pursued by her former employers, a group of space mages, and the most dangerous bounty hunter in the galaxy, she has to keep the galaxy safe while keeping her own head.

Go on

I hadn't put a great deal of thought into it other than a basic idea of combining the two. To be honest you could go a lot of directions and I think it would be interesting. In general it would be two agents (similar to xfiles) investigating and cataloging paranormal and fantastic things around the world. Not to say the stories wouldn't be exceptionally dark, but it's half a world away and the protagonists usually escape
I'm sure someone could do better with this concept though

Doing something in a similar vein (pun unintended) to There Will Be Blood. A Belgian oil prospector working on a project in the sahara desert "hires" a nomadic group of Touareg people to settle and work; after toiling under years of starvation, exhaustion and inhumane conditions, their efforts punctuated by a series of mortal accidents, the second part of the novel focuses on the lives of the nomadic children as they struggle to readjust to desert life after their parents work is finished.

Had an idea for a short story where some soldiers in some war, not sure which but most likely an older one, debate on whether or not to burn a village down and look for food/enemies/intelligence, decide not to, and later march into it with the rest of the army and see that it was burned down anyway

supreme gentleman-core
could be good
genre trash
i like the idea as long as its lighthearted
is this a meme?
1. Very good
2. ya trash
3. could be good
4. genre trash
blood meridian rip off
meme
why are pseuds so obsessed with the spanish civil war
ok
could be good if absurd enough
b8
don't do this
ya trash
i dont know why but for some reason i think this will only appeal to the dude weed lmao crowd
kek
please dont
genre trash
genre trash
ya trash
genre trash but i feel like it could be super comfy
i like the second one but i have a soft spot for sappy romance
genre trash
kek
could be good
genre trash
could be good but again im a sucker for sappy romances
genre trash
i like it
not super original but i very much like it


wow didnt realize how much genre trash there was lying about here

A group of highschoolers in a small shitty town, sell their souls to the devil in exchange for weird power. After a couple months, they all start to die, one by one. The main character has to use his wits and his mastery of the dark arts to solve the murders and stop the killer before it kills him.

>Mass reply

i'm the hero this board deserves

Yeah I know my idea was basically Crime and Punishment meets Blood Meridian, but idk maybe I can pull something good out ofit

none of my replies are meant to be taken too seriously (except for the genre trash). I actually like historical fiction and this could be done well if not too pseud-y.

Thanks

I also like historical fiction, I was thinking about time periods that could be sufficiently horrible and lawless to make good men go evil, and the Black Death kind of felt appropriate.

Thanks man