I wrote a poem for my 18 yo classmate who I plan to confess my love to. Tell me what you think, please.
I love a girl with bright blue eyes Her tongue it speaks of love not lies If she'd command me down on her I'd quickly fall then on my knees And would not mind I aim to please Till she would like a kitten purr
I love a girl with fire hair Her soft lips touch I could not bear around my cock for more than one a quarter of an hour but If I could stick it in her butt Then all my worries would be gone
I love a girl with virgin thighs A redhaired maid with bright blue eyes And speak to her of love not lust However if she seeks to know Physical love, a hearty plough My nut in her I'd gladly bust
Jordan Gonzalez
Don't do it. Terrible, terrible poem and she's going to think you are a creep.
Brayden Wright
don't
Charles Martin
>I wrote a poem for my 18 yo classmate who I plan to confess my love to
Why do people still do that?
Levi Jones
They're teenagers who think they know everything
Nathan Lee
redpillers?
Zachary Anderson
>not realizing it's a joke
Ethan Watson
Because teenagers actually do this sort of thing...
Grayson Sullivan
>If I could stick it in her butt >Then all my worries would be gone Why do you want to get shit up your urethra? What's the appeal?
Jonathan Young
...
Jason Carter
this isn't even good shitposting you guys, congrats to falling for bad bait
Leo Hill
kek I'm dying m8
Ryder Foster
accurate
Xavier Nelson
Don't just give her a copy of Schopenhauer's On women
Bentley Wright
Just tell her that she's your property
Austin Sullivan
>"""confessing""" your love Stop watching anime and just ask her out.
Noah Wright
ben. here you go
Wyatt Cox
Love it, do it
Michael Walker
Your poem is shit.
But damn Allen Casey has got me going. I would pay a lot to do very deranged actions to, with, and recive from her.
Logan Morris
Where do I find this Allen Casey? All I get are male lawyers.
Cameron Young
>writing poems in 2017
Nobody seriously does this, right? It's all just post-post ironic retards making slam poetry right?
Owen Allen
Image search ops picture. Leads to her 9gag account.
Christian Harris
My bad. Shes allisen casey. Her 9gag is online plus like 10 other pica of her on some mexican site.
Lucas Adams
>9gag I'd rather not.
Cameron Butler
But she has good pictures on the spic site.
Noah Russell
it's acceptible in two situations 1. if you're under 12 or so and people aren't self aware enough to cringe at that 2. if you're in a very specific social circle or situation that warrants it (eg, you're already in a relationship with an artsy cutie and giving her a poem for valentine's / her birthday / whatever)
anything else, dont do it, burn the poem, go see a professional on your lack of social awareness, kill yourself with a blunt object repeatedly
regardless i dont feel like the quality of the poem really factors in.
Josiah Wood
hahahaha, that's fucking golden. I love it.
Parker Diaz
And like that I have found a real picture of her and my urge to pay upwards of 10k for someone to kidnap her and bring her to me so i can break her mind into a sex toy is gone.
Now she is as boring to me as an american door.
Nolan Jackson
Humbert Humbert II?
Liam Lee
>ownership spooky
Aiden Hernandez
Nah. Im more fucked up and am interested in 17-50 year olds.
And when I fuck I say fucked. Not descriptions of flowers and trees.
Carter Long
Do you actually talk to this girl?
Hunter Sanders
I don't know if you're serious or not, but regardless please don't send it. You'll only regret it later and want to kill yourself. Just talk to her and tell her how you feel in person. Believe me, I learned the hard way.
Alexander Jones
Truly, a poem to rival the Song of Songs.
Tyler Ramirez
Just go ahead and stick it in her butt without telling her.....I just realized I have just recommend rape as dateing advice
Sebastian Barnes
DO IT
Elijah James
kids before they swallow the redpill
Easton Reyes
pennis and also dicke and balls
Austin Nguyen
>I wrote a love poem for my crush HOLY FUCK NO NO NO NO please be a troll
Sebastian Kelly
He could also offer some money on top of that, but not a lot. Just enough to be perverted.
Joshua White
Did you even read it?
Charles Thompson
Decent effort, but the meter is a bit off at times.
Ryder Green
He isn't going to do it; this is just bait.
James Murphy
>tfw seduced a woman in college by reciting a poem in class Stay jealous cunts
Joshua Myers
How young are the people in this thread?
Why is everybody in here acting reddit?
Obvious bait
Jacob Kelly
Don't do this pleas
Bentley Smith
No, redpillers are kids.
Josiah Clark
>I love a girl with bright blue eyes Stopped reading there. She should realise she is the subject half-to-two-thirds of her way through reading the poem.
>cock, butt These terms lack any sort of artistic value and should be replaced by metaphorical replacements of some form
>My nut in her I'd gladly bust I did enjoy this part. If she does get to this line despite the rest of your work, I imagine she will look up at you with a sultry smile.
Trust me on these things--I kissed a girl seven years ago.
Josiah Brown
>stopped reading at the first line >here are my critiques of the rest of it