Vert deserves a little sister to love and cuddle and coddle.
Nolan Powell
Do not invoke the serial killer
Jordan Clark
Wait, I missed a football match? What did I miss? Is it time to spank mages again?
Jackson Gutierrez
The goddesses try to help Neptune with her black cock addiction.
Tyler Ward
Pretty sure MAGES. didn't even play this time.
FYI, we lost to /gsg/ 1-0.
Lincoln Torres
Heya, 'Non!
Jacob Hill
Okay, brb, I'm renaming all my provinces "EAT MY DICK GSG"
Samuel Reed
>she sees a pool of dried pool What the fuck. That's why it's important to proofread, I missed that, and it's really embarassing.
Michael Phillips
Why is arfoire trying to get spank fags help
Carson Bell
I know.
The next game will involve a battle between MS-chan and Steam-chan over dominion of the PC continent. This later spills out to the rest of Gamindustri as the Planeptune and Lastation are claimed by Steam-chan while MS-chan claims Leanbox and Lowee.
The CPUs must find a way to free their lands. Or something like that.
Xavier James
You disappoint me /nepgen/ Slav(e) subhumans beat /mggg/ 2-0, what kept you from sticking it to /gsg/?
Kayden Morris
not sure about sisters, but I can give her many daughters if she wants
Benjamin Hernandez
>If you want to make it seem a bit more tragic Why wouldn't I want that?
Carter Ortiz
Rom no, this is the l337 edition, you were supposed to meme it up, not cute-ify it!
Josiah Barnes
Arfoire-focused game were the best so i have some ideas >Arfoire is an actual threat again >Maybe some sort of Arfoire's close follower, like the one from manga but with an actual power to invade cpus. maybe the head of pc continent. Imagine a relationshit similiar to the one between DIO and Pucci
Jason Green
That's why I mentioned it.
Gavin Harris
Sonicomi with neps. Plot is basically the same as PP.
Daniel Wright
That's a long 15 minutes. Would that I had that kind of stamina.
Gavin Rivera
You well never get a handmade scarf, from a nep.
Andrew Rodriguez
Gamindustri Olympic Games?
James Bell
I would definitely buy it
Christopher Ward
Why the hell Nepgear need to transform just to knit?
>Also, "Nep & Gear"
Brayden Jackson
Curretly editing the stuff. There are a couple of things I want to keep, but the one that bothers me the most so far is the part with Kasume. I used "so that maid", because I imagined Nepgear talking to herself, and thus "that maid" came out as filled with scorn. Kinda like you'd say "that thing" instead of "my neighbour", with a small pause between "that" and "thing". Not sure how I can make it obvious that Nepgear absolutely scorns Kasume, so I added a sentence about her.
It was a pretty wild ride. Can't explain it all because off topic, but let's just say that my neighbour is no longer allowed to drills holes.
Andrew Smith
she's dumb
Jayden Rivera
or she just couldn't focus enough, to not turn it into some strange device...
Henry Cook
Teaching feelings with post-conquest Nepgear
Jordan Cooper
nah, she's just dumb she's the type of girl you could easily convince to suck your dick
Bentley Long
She is still very obsessed with machines even when transformed. Anonydeath tried to distract Nepgear in her HDD form, which worked. She was only stopped by PH.
Written by : Anonymous. Proofread by : Anonymous. Additional advices : Anonymous. Marketing : Anonymous. Encouragements : Anonymous. Executive Producer : Anonymous. Gaffer : Anonymous. Fuckboy : Anonymous. I should make a fanfic.net account to save it for good.
Gabriel Kelly
Fair enough. I felt that "so the maid was a magician" flowed better, but that works just as well. You could consider an ellipsis between 'that' and 'maid', as if she's considering which derogatory word to use before settling on maid, perhaps. Alternately, you could have Nepgear not even refer to her even in her thoughts as a maid, but as some more derogatory term.
Caleb Ross
can I still become a planeptunian if i like eggplants?
Cameron Lopez
no!!!!!!!
Henry Martin
Might as well send in the immigration form. Nep won't even read it before signing, just like all the other documents.
David Brooks
...
Eli Ward
Well. Ill use that as oportunity to drop off mansion wild ride for some time as i dont even have a single idea what to do with it. Probably reducting it to gearnon's circlejerk. I might post something like nep's SoL eventually.
Ryder Rogers
Wait what the fuck is that?
Not like the mansion is a democracy anyway. I never knew what to do with it, Kasume and you had more ideas than me about it.
Jack Butler
Looks quite a bit cleaner. If you were to do any more edits, I'd capitalize the A in 'any idea' on line 33, and replace the space and colon with a coma and space on line 34, moving the quote from line 35 up to there. And on line 66, probably remove the 'away', since remove already means to pull it out and away. Other than that, I can see that it's still definitely in your voice, which I was a bit worried about overwriting with all my changes, so that's good. Keep on writing, you'll make an author yet.
Austin Russell
It's your death! Look on my works, ye Mighty, and despair!
In my voice? Anyway, added the changes. That's why I set an expiration date, I expected I'd have to change a few more things.
Andrew Butler
>shitty fanfic was all we needed to remove mansion
Nathaniel Barnes
it's like the one ring. It can only be unmade the way it was made.
Don't get me wrong. Mansion will come back - but in simplified way and without asspulling random stuff. There has to be made a decision on how to make characters look more like a living beings rather than bag of stereotypes and memes
Ayden Turner
Yeah, like we can agree on anything.
Charles Torres
>a fanfic created the mansion >a fanfic ended the mansion Ripperonni in pepperoni
Juan Ortiz
You guys still have to convince kasume to stop. And I'm only giving it a break
William Thomas
All we need is Blanc's Wrecking Crew.
Gavin Brown
>shitty Why do you say things that hurt my fee-fees?
Isaac Foster
I want to nep Big Nep!
Hunter Cooper
Yeah, it still feels and reads like something you wrote, in your style without the edits sticking out and feeling different from the rest. On line 6, IF 'sees' the blood, as opposed to 'see'. Also, it looks like you have an extra space just before the large pool of blood. I'm still unsure about IF referring to Gearnon just as 'he's here', when later, they say very similar things about whether they've found Spankfag or not, which has a bigger impact on Compa. The elaboration on the maid scene works out pretty well at showing disgust for how she acts and hides. Although unless Nepgear didn't kill the other maids that were used as meat shields, the next line should pluralize to 'Leaving the dead maids behind'. Other than that, most of my quibbles can boil down to style differences, I think.
Easton Jenkins
Praise Neptune!
Juan Foster
My one and only goddess!
Hudson Watson
>Nepgear absolutely scorns Kasume Is it because of that one time?
Luke Nelson
>you will never be /ss/ed by Vert
Lucas White
There are no other maids, it's a reference to how Gearnon went straight toward Nepgear, Spankfag ran away to recover his weapons and make a last stand, and even Lindafag tries to attack back, whereas Kasume just hid and waited for Nepgear to find them. Compared to the others, Kasume tried to run away, and Nepgear interpretated it as cowardice.
Otherwise, I fixed a few more things, and changed IF's line to reflect the fact that she knows Gearnon, but really only care about Spankfag. I'll have to upload a more recent version, but I don't want to upload a gazillion versions.
Aw, that's horrible. Poor little NepJr looks so sad.
Jaxson Johnson
What do you want to do to Iffy anons?
Lincoln Young
That was terrible. And bad. And awful.
SPANK HER
And then enjoy the hot sun.
Daniel Reed
pet her head
Bentley Rodriguez
Break her phone. And her rectum.
Connor Wood
Lick her snatch.
Christopher Scott
Make her stiffy
Jayden Ramirez
Look at Tennouboshi Uzume Thanks to her Sega stopped making consoles and almost went bankrupt She is a fucking failure Be a cool person, user, don't be like this failure of a """"Goddess""""
Ryder James
But a sexy failure that I'd like to stick my dick in.
Jonathan Lee
What's your call?
Austin Johnson
Is there any art of her dressed as or with Sonic?
David Cox
Okay. I had thought you were referring to other maids when you mentioned her kin.
Joseph Cooper
No, that's because in the original lore, they were all kins, all direct descendants of Arfoire. Which is why Nepgear killed them all, she figured that leaving one of them alive would motivate the survivors to come after her later.
Brandon Evans
Y'all tried but only Is a man of culture who knows what is good in life.
Benjamin Gray
I see, it makes sense now. I'd never really looked all that much into the mansion lore, desu.
Jace Peterson
I just had an idea. An awful idea. I got a wonderful, awful idea. So I set out to find infos about the mansion, and tried to incorporate it in a narrative, resulting in a slaughter.
Sebastian Scott
Why are neps so cute when they're bullied?
Hunter Rodriguez
It's a mystery, but not one that needs to be solved.
Daniel Perez
The question was about 4GO, chief. None of those characters appear in that game.