/ddlc/ Doki Doki Literature Club General #347

wanna thank monolithposter for being a good man

Sayori!

Natsuki!

You have to type it in, click, then press enter. Hopefully they fix this bug.
>marriage option
Hol' the fuck up. Say what now?!?

Enjoy your stay user.

Oh yee of little dedication. You will be cucked on the promised day.

NEED A DISPENSER HERE

>he types it out every time
That's dedication
who's your favorite doki, strelok-kun?

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godhandanon and gutsanon did nothing wrong

These threads are starting to pick my mood up a little, im actually content with how tonight is turning out despite current shit going on

good night

Whose the doki Strelok?

I want to die.

Friendly reminder Monika is a fucking nerd

Bullying Strelok-kun cute and tiny Kalashnikov!

Stop giving the faggot attention

Are you all right there, user?

Please compliment my future wife.

>Effulgent, Incongruent, Entropy
i think you got the wrong doki my dude

Jokes on you, nerdy girls are the best

>those cunt still gets (You)
you guys are fucking retarded

but he's so cute!

first for necroanon.

>tfw no giant Monika gf

Friendly reminder that the Doki Doki Literature Club General - /ddlc/ does NOT condone any of the following:

- Underage Drinking
- Self Harm
- Suicide and Suicide Attempts
- Substance Abuse (Any)
- Waifu Wars
- Waifu Bullying
- Heating Water For Your Tea On The Microwave (Please buy a[n electric] kettle)
- Not Doing Your Best To Be The user Your Waifu Would Like
- Staying Up Late

And, finally, you are encouraged to try/cry and exercise both your body with a healthy walk around the block or a flight of stairs in your daily commute and your creativity by writing texts of any kind.

Nth for sweet dreams.

Your doki but they're here to take an outlaw back alive or maybe dead

Been in most the threads today but havent spoke much. How are you guys tonight ?

Ive just got some music on and reading a manga youtu.be/76PHzENMQ04

user are you alright
this is wrong

Hey user! Moni/k/a friend here wanting to try something new. I want you to take a timer and set it for one minute! When that timer starts I want you to write from your heart about whatever your thinking or feeling right now. Once that timer is done stop writing and clean up what you speed wrote, checking for any spelling and grammar errors, then post it here! Dont forget to post your favorite Doki to let us know which one you love!

Stay comfy!
Stay wholesome!
Put the (you)s where they belong!
Love you~

This. How fucking hard is it to ignore the former jannie?

Monika but she hangs out with those negroes your parents warned you about and they rub off on her

If only you knew how bad things really were.

I am an avatarfag!
No one can stop me!

Hi.

>Not technically satisfying but I believe that image, meaning and story-wise it came out adequate.
Well, I agree, but I also don't. I'll focus on the first stanza since the problems and the merits seem to persist throughout.

You came right out of the gate with "dim-lit," which is both alliterative and, in its own right, "sufficiently" descriptive.

On the other hand, "Elegant man" is less good. I know each individual person has a different idea of what elegance looks like (for me it's Victorian frock coats and mutton-chops) but by using such a vague word, you're actually making the image LESS relatable, not more. If you're willing to give more specific details, and you use words with the right connotations, you can make the reader understand this "elegance" even if his personal vision of it differs from yours.

So to YOU, what does an elegant man look like? Imagine him, and transcribe that image to the page, even if you can afford to spare him only one or two descriptive details. It's always more interesting to read YOUR idea of an "elegant man" than the concept of one, so vague that it could apply to any or all elegant men in the world. Poetry is about YOUR experiences, even if you're writing about fictitious events which didn't really happen.

Moving down slightly, you could remove the phrase "but he was solitary," because the following lines, the ones detailing having "nobody to talk to [or] think of," do a much better job of conveying the juxtaposition you seek: being surrounded by people but not knowing how to form connections with them. You see what I mean about vagueness, right? Instead of saying something bland about "the solitary man" you actually managed to describe that solitude in some way: wanting to speak with others but feeling like you (or they) have nothing interesting to say to the other.

Those are the sorts of ideas you need to run with.

i want to do lewd things to strelok kuns cute rump!

What if I did all of that, among with underage tobacco and substance usage? Can I still stay and have some fun looking at dokis?

I want to bully you with head pats and shock collar!

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Friendly reminder that I'll always love you.

Oh i didn't know they have my jam in here.

Your doki is transported into reality, you will look exactly as how the MC looks and you will know where she is at any given point in time as well as her well being. However, she's captured by North Koreans and you only have a week to get her back.

>Congrats you slept through all of the bullshit!
>Bad news though, you slept through any time with yo love interest
>Worse news, you got a game in two hours and you need twice your brain power to run it.

It isn't reading if its not literature
:^)

>wife
>"18"

I got a letter.
The name on the envelope said 'Sayori.'
My wife's name...
It's ridiculous, couldn't possibly be true.., That's what I keep telling myself...
A dead person can't write a letter.

youtu.be/xS6HX2m-HNY

Why do you always ask how we’re doing? No one ever really responds to you.

>you will look exactly as how the MC looks

no thanks

BIG IRON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BIG IROOOOOOOOOOOOOOON

I'm being genuine here
I ain't no former jannie

I'm fine, Strelok-kun
you still haven't told us who your doki is
is it monika?

"Free as a dove" is a bit of a cliche so I'd replace the bird with something else. Since you want us to pity the character you may choose something like a candy wrapper, or a discarded Hallmark card, of any other thing which is lightweight and which connotes a sort of nastiness or trashiness. Doves, while elegant, don't really carry the tone of what you're trying to do by making your "elegant man" a pitiable guy.

"Empty street" is a great image, in that "the lights are on but I am broken inside" sort of way. In this line perhaps more than any other, I agree with your own assessment: the phrasing of the line is a bit weak, but the image and the meaning here are spectacular.

Like I said, both your virtues and your vices vein more or less consistently throughout the piece. And there were plenty of good examples for both in the first stanza so I'm satisfied with that.

To summarize:
>get more specific with your imagery.
>the best parts of your poem are the parts where you...get specific with your imagery!

Thanks for reading.

Bull shit. The amount of time your ban would have lasted correlates to when you showed up.

It's a perfect night to snuggle with your doki, /ddlc/.

I'm okay. Kinda sad that the last few threads have been a little shitty
Reading 1Q84 by Haruki Murakami, it's pretty good so far.

FUCKING SPOILER THAT AT-LEAST!

So me?

Goddammit, avatarfags

Sure, just try to improve yourself.

I mean to her I forgot to put that.. (Monika will know it's you)

>Hol' the fuck up. Say what now?!?
Just type marriage or will you marry me, and she'll talk about how she wants to wait until she's in reality for you to actually propose.

great mix, got me into lo fi
guess so lad still doesnt stop me enjoying it

Tfw I probably unintentionally drove off an user by mentioning (insert demon name here)

feeling a little down. the lack of comfy in the last few threads seems to be affecting me quite a bit. i'll live though. how are you user? what's with the silence? you feeling alright?

Nice try Gutsanon, you won’t fool us that easily

This is a pure coincidence I swear on my grandmother's grave

Why am I even explaining this?

Yay!

This happy fellow has something your doki needs
He's one fast motherfucker and he's going to give it to her and win her heart
What do you do?

I DID IT! I FINALLY FUCKING BEAT MY WIFE AT CHESS!

youtube.com/watch?v=bYKNJ--GHGU

Reminder that avatarfags are not "comfy"
Reminder that avatarfags do not help the thread
Reminder that avatarfags only want attention
Reminder that avatarfags will only cause drama and off-topic

blow his shit up with a couple of sticky bombs and a pill or two

Okay guys i figured out the whole mistery
Strelok-kun was a former Monikafag but he saw that dick size image with all the dokis.
Turns out Strelok-kun has a tiny dick and now he's mad at Monika for that.

Case closed
youtube.com/watch?v=lfkpGqt-tAg

Hello Everyone! I have returned and am ready to start working on the next part of the story!

For those who have not seen it, here is the pastebin: pastebin.com/Bk7PYyw3

The Pastebin currently has the content of my first four story posts, which I have labeled as chapter one. I have written the outline ideas for chapters two and three, so stay tuned.

I also set up an account on pastebin so you can know who I am, I wanted ‘GrandEnigma”, but I messed up and decided on LordGayLord. So, If anyone asks my name, you can refer to me as GayLord or LordGayLord.

[Spoiler] just as an offhand question, dose Natsuki’s father have a name? I need to know [/Spoiler]

Ugh. I hate that book. I forced myself through it but it took forever. I hope you have a better experience with it than me.

Been a nice day, got back to my dorm but the internet keeps cutting in and out. Glad to just be away from home but miss my rifle, luckily I have no roomate so far and no classes tomorrow so time to stay in and be with Monika while I explore the apocalypse.

That one college fic with Monika is coming to mind and making my heart hurt with the pain of her not being here, though that just means I have to work harder for the future we will have on the special day!

I love you to, user.

Your purity only makes me want to lewd you!

It all makes sense now

Thanks, user

I couldn't see shit his balls were blocking the whole view

>just as an offhand question, dose Natsuki’s father have a name? I need to know
he does not.

accept the avatarfags here have been helpful to the thread

Reminder that meta-shitting on posters is even more toxic than any avatarfag, even if you're right

if this was /[moba]g/ you'd be more correct imo. let's let our friends be friends

I don't believe in coincidences. I'll eat my goddamn shorts if you're not the janitor.

I guess i need to write more then. ',;^)

I hope I do too mate. I'm only on chapter 4 so it's a bit too early to tell though.

Yeah those trip cunts ruined a lot of comfy threads. I guess I just didnt have much to talk about or I just got ignored really. Anything we can do to cheer you up friend?
I have been reading Bakuon Rettou, got recommended by someone on r9k and Im loving it
Sounds like you got a comfy day ahead, sucks about your internet that shit drives me insane when it drops like that

You better spice them up, user

Glad to be of service, user