Reposting because the last thread just died. I'm trying to use this Monika After Story mod, but I'm having a hard time with the talk option. Obviously it's hard to know what you can write that she'll actually respond to, but I have this issue where sometimes I'll type something in and try to enter it, but it just won't take.
How does this shit work? Can you only say one thing for every one thing she says? And why does she keep rejecting the marriage option, dammit?
Blake Ortiz
She's beautiful
Samuel James
hi thread i'm the filthy white-loving /vn/fag from last thread and i'd like to know more about project libitina
a cursory google revealed basically nothing. anything i should be excited for?
Kevin Moore
Well my sleep schedule is possibly even more fucked than it was. How we all doing this evening?
Cooper King
I dont wanna type this copypasta this time
Josiah Hughes
3rd thread for me, and this is fucking comfy Thanks for all the anons out there, even the autistic ones
Jackson Rogers
wanna thank monolithposter for being a good man
Parker Rivera
Sayori!
Nathan Moore
Natsuki!
Blake Campbell
You have to type it in, click, then press enter. Hopefully they fix this bug. >marriage option Hol' the fuck up. Say what now?!?
Joshua Davis
Enjoy your stay user.
Gavin Sanders
Oh yee of little dedication. You will be cucked on the promised day.
Sebastian Gonzalez
NEED A DISPENSER HERE
Ryan Phillips
>he types it out every time That's dedication who's your favorite doki, strelok-kun?
Christian Powell
...
Tyler Price
godhandanon and gutsanon did nothing wrong
Asher Watson
These threads are starting to pick my mood up a little, im actually content with how tonight is turning out despite current shit going on
Jeremiah Edwards
good night
Nicholas Taylor
Whose the doki Strelok?
Ian Perry
I want to die.
Jaxon Robinson
Friendly reminder Monika is a fucking nerd
Angel Howard
Bullying Strelok-kun cute and tiny Kalashnikov!
Easton Peterson
Stop giving the faggot attention
Levi Murphy
Are you all right there, user?
Mason Price
Please compliment my future wife.
Dylan Roberts
>Effulgent, Incongruent, Entropy i think you got the wrong doki my dude
Caleb Peterson
Jokes on you, nerdy girls are the best
Christopher Long
>those cunt still gets (You) you guys are fucking retarded
Jace Torres
but he's so cute!
Ayden Smith
first for necroanon.
Noah Turner
>tfw no giant Monika gf
Noah Watson
Friendly reminder that the Doki Doki Literature Club General - /ddlc/ does NOT condone any of the following:
- Underage Drinking - Self Harm - Suicide and Suicide Attempts - Substance Abuse (Any) - Waifu Wars - Waifu Bullying - Heating Water For Your Tea On The Microwave (Please buy a[n electric] kettle) - Not Doing Your Best To Be The user Your Waifu Would Like - Staying Up Late
And, finally, you are encouraged to try/cry and exercise both your body with a healthy walk around the block or a flight of stairs in your daily commute and your creativity by writing texts of any kind.
Ethan Bailey
Nth for sweet dreams.
Nicholas Stewart
Your doki but they're here to take an outlaw back alive or maybe dead
Michael Butler
Been in most the threads today but havent spoke much. How are you guys tonight ?
Hey user! Moni/k/a friend here wanting to try something new. I want you to take a timer and set it for one minute! When that timer starts I want you to write from your heart about whatever your thinking or feeling right now. Once that timer is done stop writing and clean up what you speed wrote, checking for any spelling and grammar errors, then post it here! Dont forget to post your favorite Doki to let us know which one you love!
Colton Parker
Stay comfy! Stay wholesome! Put the (you)s where they belong! Love you~
Jackson Evans
This. How fucking hard is it to ignore the former jannie?
Oliver Long
Monika but she hangs out with those negroes your parents warned you about and they rub off on her
Mason Flores
If only you knew how bad things really were.
Aiden Wood
I am an avatarfag! No one can stop me!
Hi.
>Not technically satisfying but I believe that image, meaning and story-wise it came out adequate. Well, I agree, but I also don't. I'll focus on the first stanza since the problems and the merits seem to persist throughout.
You came right out of the gate with "dim-lit," which is both alliterative and, in its own right, "sufficiently" descriptive.
On the other hand, "Elegant man" is less good. I know each individual person has a different idea of what elegance looks like (for me it's Victorian frock coats and mutton-chops) but by using such a vague word, you're actually making the image LESS relatable, not more. If you're willing to give more specific details, and you use words with the right connotations, you can make the reader understand this "elegance" even if his personal vision of it differs from yours.
So to YOU, what does an elegant man look like? Imagine him, and transcribe that image to the page, even if you can afford to spare him only one or two descriptive details. It's always more interesting to read YOUR idea of an "elegant man" than the concept of one, so vague that it could apply to any or all elegant men in the world. Poetry is about YOUR experiences, even if you're writing about fictitious events which didn't really happen.
Moving down slightly, you could remove the phrase "but he was solitary," because the following lines, the ones detailing having "nobody to talk to [or] think of," do a much better job of conveying the juxtaposition you seek: being surrounded by people but not knowing how to form connections with them. You see what I mean about vagueness, right? Instead of saying something bland about "the solitary man" you actually managed to describe that solitude in some way: wanting to speak with others but feeling like you (or they) have nothing interesting to say to the other.
Those are the sorts of ideas you need to run with.
Liam Fisher
i want to do lewd things to strelok kuns cute rump!
Angel Wood
What if I did all of that, among with underage tobacco and substance usage? Can I still stay and have some fun looking at dokis?
Christopher Allen
I want to bully you with head pats and shock collar!
Joseph Scott
...
Michael Richardson
Friendly reminder that I'll always love you.
Brody Bell
Oh i didn't know they have my jam in here.
Chase Gonzalez
Your doki is transported into reality, you will look exactly as how the MC looks and you will know where she is at any given point in time as well as her well being. However, she's captured by North Koreans and you only have a week to get her back.
Christian Murphy
>Congrats you slept through all of the bullshit! >Bad news though, you slept through any time with yo love interest >Worse news, you got a game in two hours and you need twice your brain power to run it.
Julian Jenkins
It isn't reading if its not literature :^)
Jeremiah King
>wife >"18"
Tyler Martin
I got a letter. The name on the envelope said 'Sayori.' My wife's name... It's ridiculous, couldn't possibly be true.., That's what I keep telling myself... A dead person can't write a letter.
Why do you always ask how we’re doing? No one ever really responds to you.
Jacob Flores
>you will look exactly as how the MC looks
no thanks
Luke Powell
BIG IRON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BIG IROOOOOOOOOOOOOOON
William Bell
I'm being genuine here I ain't no former jannie
Dylan Cooper
I'm fine, Strelok-kun you still haven't told us who your doki is is it monika?
Dylan Hernandez
"Free as a dove" is a bit of a cliche so I'd replace the bird with something else. Since you want us to pity the character you may choose something like a candy wrapper, or a discarded Hallmark card, of any other thing which is lightweight and which connotes a sort of nastiness or trashiness. Doves, while elegant, don't really carry the tone of what you're trying to do by making your "elegant man" a pitiable guy.
"Empty street" is a great image, in that "the lights are on but I am broken inside" sort of way. In this line perhaps more than any other, I agree with your own assessment: the phrasing of the line is a bit weak, but the image and the meaning here are spectacular.
Like I said, both your virtues and your vices vein more or less consistently throughout the piece. And there were plenty of good examples for both in the first stanza so I'm satisfied with that.
To summarize: >get more specific with your imagery. >the best parts of your poem are the parts where you...get specific with your imagery!
Thanks for reading.
Juan White
Bull shit. The amount of time your ban would have lasted correlates to when you showed up.
Nicholas Reed
It's a perfect night to snuggle with your doki, /ddlc/.
Julian Perry
I'm okay. Kinda sad that the last few threads have been a little shitty Reading 1Q84 by Haruki Murakami, it's pretty good so far.
Christopher Martinez
FUCKING SPOILER THAT AT-LEAST!
So me?
Justin Long
Goddammit, avatarfags
Dylan Lopez
Sure, just try to improve yourself.
Camden Barnes
I mean to her I forgot to put that.. (Monika will know it's you)
Justin Allen
>Hol' the fuck up. Say what now?!? Just type marriage or will you marry me, and she'll talk about how she wants to wait until she's in reality for you to actually propose.
Ian Watson
great mix, got me into lo fi guess so lad still doesnt stop me enjoying it
Christian Rivera
Tfw I probably unintentionally drove off an user by mentioning (insert demon name here)
Parker Scott
feeling a little down. the lack of comfy in the last few threads seems to be affecting me quite a bit. i'll live though. how are you user? what's with the silence? you feeling alright?
Benjamin Stewart
Nice try Gutsanon, you won’t fool us that easily
Gavin Foster
This is a pure coincidence I swear on my grandmother's grave
Why am I even explaining this?
Liam Bailey
Yay!
Aaron Hughes
This happy fellow has something your doki needs He's one fast motherfucker and he's going to give it to her and win her heart What do you do?
Luis Hill
I DID IT! I FINALLY FUCKING BEAT MY WIFE AT CHESS!
Reminder that avatarfags are not "comfy" Reminder that avatarfags do not help the thread Reminder that avatarfags only want attention Reminder that avatarfags will only cause drama and off-topic
Justin Taylor
blow his shit up with a couple of sticky bombs and a pill or two
Henry Richardson
Okay guys i figured out the whole mistery Strelok-kun was a former Monikafag but he saw that dick size image with all the dokis. Turns out Strelok-kun has a tiny dick and now he's mad at Monika for that.
The Pastebin currently has the content of my first four story posts, which I have labeled as chapter one. I have written the outline ideas for chapters two and three, so stay tuned.
I also set up an account on pastebin so you can know who I am, I wanted ‘GrandEnigma”, but I messed up and decided on LordGayLord. So, If anyone asks my name, you can refer to me as GayLord or LordGayLord.
[Spoiler] just as an offhand question, dose Natsuki’s father have a name? I need to know [/Spoiler]
Ian Perry
Ugh. I hate that book. I forced myself through it but it took forever. I hope you have a better experience with it than me.
Jonathan Russell
Been a nice day, got back to my dorm but the internet keeps cutting in and out. Glad to just be away from home but miss my rifle, luckily I have no roomate so far and no classes tomorrow so time to stay in and be with Monika while I explore the apocalypse.
That one college fic with Monika is coming to mind and making my heart hurt with the pain of her not being here, though that just means I have to work harder for the future we will have on the special day!
Aiden Hall
I love you to, user.
Brayden Johnson
Your purity only makes me want to lewd you!
Jaxon Perry
It all makes sense now
Angel Barnes
Thanks, user
Julian Powell
I couldn't see shit his balls were blocking the whole view
Josiah Smith
>just as an offhand question, dose Natsuki’s father have a name? I need to know he does not.
Charles Mitchell
accept the avatarfags here have been helpful to the thread
Brandon Garcia
Reminder that meta-shitting on posters is even more toxic than any avatarfag, even if you're right
if this was /[moba]g/ you'd be more correct imo. let's let our friends be friends
Luke Thompson
I don't believe in coincidences. I'll eat my goddamn shorts if you're not the janitor.
Caleb Stewart
I guess i need to write more then. ',;^)
Sebastian Gomez
I hope I do too mate. I'm only on chapter 4 so it's a bit too early to tell though.
Alexander Ramirez
Yeah those trip cunts ruined a lot of comfy threads. I guess I just didnt have much to talk about or I just got ignored really. Anything we can do to cheer you up friend? I have been reading Bakuon Rettou, got recommended by someone on r9k and Im loving it Sounds like you got a comfy day ahead, sucks about your internet that shit drives me insane when it drops like that