Rate my setting

Hey Veeky Forums, rate my setting:

>In the beginning, there were the Eldritch Powers. Godly engines of force and change. In the bubbling cesspool of reality, life began to take form.
>this form was the Faey.
>The faey are basically elves combined with the magical powers of fairies and the elements.
>They decide that the Eldritch are disgusting, and wage war with them. Creating great titans and using their powers of the elements to combat the abominations sent by the Eldritch.
> They win, and establish themselves as the rulers of the world.
However, their conflict is not over, as they now have to combat the creatures of the world.
>Many artifacts are still left over from that war, such as the massive skeletons of giants and dragons.
> They utilize their immortality to create life, and in turn make humans, dwarves, and elves.
> Dwarves are fashioned as hard workers and tradesmen, to shape the lands in the view of the Faey
> Humans are meant to be soldiers, sailors, and scholars, as well as being the jack of all trades.
>Elves are sent as holy-figures, to deliver the words of the Faey, and rule over the lower class.

Also, Daemonic Entities begin to form. They are fueled by all of humanity’s collective vice and violence.

Animosity between the races grown, until a groundbreaking discovery gives humanity its upper edge.

> Great runes are discovered, carved into the earth.
> These runes, unusable to the Faey, give humans and dwarves the ability to cast magic.
> Every rune’s purpose was discovered, and catalogued in secret.
> Humanity, hating it’s role as servants to the gods, ally with the dwarves to revolt.
> They ask for help from the great archdaemons, who lend soldiers of men transformed into beasts.
> A horrifying virus was created, that turned many elves into disgusting orc and goblins.
> The Faey returned by invoking the elemental powers to bring great plagues of fire, floods, and pestilence.
> Still, humanity and lesser daemons still massively outnumbered the faey and elves, if only in number and not power.

A great war was waged, and only stopped in a shaky truce when the Eldritch horrors of eons past reemerged onto the earth, and forced the three races to work together.

> The only surviving mortal from the battle was an unknown human wizard, who was eventually converted into a demigod by the Faey because of his use of a great rune to smite down the eldritch leviathan, Ttovarcht.

>faey
Drop that 'y' nigguh.

It is now 40,000 years later, and the world is still divided by race and religion, but has begun to heal somewhat.

> Beastmen live in raider camps in the worlds great deserts.
> Humans live in cities inside the forests and alongside the coast.
> Dwarven architects build great palaces and cities
> Intermixing has produced half-orcs, half-elves, etc.

Many interesting locales also exist, such as:

> The Deadyard, a site of a massive battle between Faey titans and eldritch horrors.
> Gynce, the primary elven kingdom, situated inside of a cozy peninsula. Currently in the throes of a revolt, triggered by political corruption.
> Durnlande, the dwarven mountain stronghold, fascistic in nature, and wary of other races.
> Blacre, a collective smattering of human settlements and villages, are ruled by a shaky council alliance.
> The Turnsands, a great desert said to have been the site of the great lightening spell that destroyed Ttovarcht. Occupied by beastmen raiders.

>faey just fight the eldritch and win

Boring. Feels lime a waste.

Either use the Eldritch in true undefeatable eternal that-which-is-not-dead-may-lie-eternally Lovecraftian fashion, or don't use the Eldritch at all and instead just start the beginning of the world with the Faey.

M8, the eldritch are coming back bruv, thats what kicks off the second half of the plot. They fleshy shootable ones just went back into their hidey-hole to wait until Papa Ooglywizzlezicks comes back and kicks their ass.

Even the reemergence of the Eldritch in your story can be rewritten with say a powerhungry Faey dipping in demonic power, and the demons betraying their allies and following the Satanic Legolas.

If you want to go Eldritch, go full Eldritch.

It is the year 37,802. And things have gotten worse.

> Crops are dying, and winters seem to be longer than they ever were.
> Gynce is ridden with corruption, but still tries to enact its ruling over the people.
> Strange, disgusting abominations have been destroying entire villages, at first, people blamed the beastmen, but then even they began to be slaughtered.
> More runes are popping up in places people had already searched.
> The Daemons want to collect on their deal with Humanity.
And above all, people are going mad in the streets, proclaiming cryptic prophecies of a return of the Old Ones.

>Faey
My spirit instantaneously evaporated from my body, causing me to briefly lose consciousness, I stopped reading so fast.

Okay, then just Fae, or "Blessed Elves", or some other shit. like that. It's a working title, I guess.

The world doesn't need another way to spell fairy.

Fairy then. I just wanted something to convey a sense of being godlike, but still having the glamour of a fairy or elf.

A typical mage would be an Archivist, studying runes to learn their power, and utilizing that to summon spells.

Most earn a lesser living, being fishermen, farmers, trappers, and soldiers.

Playable races would be; Humans, Dwarves, Half-Elves, Blessed Elves, Goblins, Orcs, Sirens, and Tieflings.

That's pretty much the groundwork I've laid out. I know it's way less fleshed out than it should be, but I plan on adding more to it as it goes along, expanding it with each adventure.

Interesting ideas and constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.

>Also, Daemonic Entities begin to form. They are fueled by all of humanity’s collective vice and violence.
Seriously? Of all the races in your setting demons are only fueled by horrible disgusting good-for-nothing hummies? My interest has just plummeted.

How would you make it more interesting? My humanity I actually meant all races except for the Fae, sorry for some miscommunication.

Why the modernized stock Tolkien racelist? Why do you need dwarves, elves, humans, goblins, orcs and tieflings? Are you doing anything with them that makes them meaningful or different from what the generalized understanding of what those races are? If so, why not reskin them and call them something else? Conventions aren't bad in and of themselves, but when you mess with them artfully you can revitalize their meaning and life.

If you've got fae creatures versus eldritch horrors, why not just focus on those two tropes and expand on them? There are different ethnicities of humans, why couldn't there be different ethnicities of Fae?

Cliched as fuck.

In FORTY FUCKING THOUSAND YEARS, all the sentient races only reached medieval level technology?

That's THRICE the amount of time passed from Neolithic to modern times IRL.
4/10, would not play.

Good points! I see that these two could probably be worked into each other, playing more with different varieties of elves/fae. I had played with the idea, namely with Siren's being the Fae patrons of the sea, and Orcs/Goblins being degenerative diseased Elves.

Daemons don't fit in your setting (and in most settings really). They seem to be just a tool to stroke guilt complex about bad flawed mortals, cheap, crappy and pointless. They have no reason to exist besides that.

But user, most of what technology cannot be, can be done with magic. Maybe I should turn the time passed from 40,000 to a much lesser number? To be fair, 40,000 was just pulled out of my ass.

I created the idea of Daemons to give a sort of upper edge towards humanity, in exchange for a "favor" later on. One other idea I had flirted with was to make Daemon less-demonic and focus them into more of an animalistic force of nature, going back into a simpler time of eat,kill,fuck.

try about 6 or 7 thousand years. Unless colossal fuckups are happening on a cosmic scale forcing sapient life to fall into a constant moonwalk there's no sense in 40k years passing and the highest tech being bread.

>most of what technology cannot be, can be done with magic
How? How does magic here work? Why is magic so powerful and reliable? What is its source of such power?

>It is the year 3,782. And things have gotten worse.

Better? I'd say so.

You should absolutely do that. I'll even point to 40k which I usually hate to do. And that piece of shit does have magic, and humanity there managed to get to level III on Kardashev scale, and lose all that shit. Multiple times.

For what purpose?

Need a fire? If you know the rune, just scratch it into the dirt, build your kindling around it, and say the magic words.

Why is magic so simple and powerful?

If I were to go with the simpler, more animal daemons, I'd say that their allure comes from the philosophy that ignorance is bliss, indulging in vices without a care is a very animal thing. And I believe that they shouldn't be so much of a big red, horned Satan as manifestations of indulgences.

I can just use a cart with spiked wheels to draw a rune around an enemy city. So big the city fits in one of the empty spaces. And then say the magic words. Boom, the city's fucking gone. And the surroundings, too.

Expect your players to behave like this. Or worse. Either put some hard limits and enforce them or deal with bullshit all the time. And dealing with bullshit by adding more bullshit is a sure-fire way to wreck your game.

Tbh, I don't know. Setting wise, people bullshit that its the remnants of the Eldritch's habitation of the earth. It's shrouded in mystery, but it's a very useful tool, but limited to scholars and people who commit themselves to study them. And in a world with a mostly illiterate population, who tend to care more about when they should bring in their goats, than about some weird symbols they found scratched into a rock.

>And I believe that they shouldn't be so much of a big red, horned Satan
You ended up with big red, horned Satan but without system of morals attached. No reason for demons to exist and work like that.

Tbh senpai, your setting sounds like cookie cutter Western fantasy but with runes everywhere. It's pretty boring and bland from what I've heard so far. Nothing really stands out.

That's a situation I'm trying to deal with, how to limit power without bullshit. I like the idea of wizards going mad with how much shit they have to commit to memory, that they have to take it in slowly, with some voluntarily becoming liches to enhance their knowledge-base. But, to use an example from an anime, In the FMA manga, the homunculi's major plan is sort of what you were trying to do, creating a giant "fuck-you" rune around an entire country. What if, every rune only works well in small, concentrated doses, like, the fire example I listed earlier would work perfectly, and fireblasts could still work, but all your giant rune idea would do is make the area inside the circle a little bit hotter? Idk, just some ideas I had regarding that issue.

I won't lie, I've been trying to give it that "My setting is unique and kewl!" Idea without being gimmicky. I tried that with the dead giants everywhere, and the shaky truce between all of the powers that be, resulting in a tumultuous political climate. When putting in a new street may cause a bunch of die-hard elven worshipers to pray for their god to smite you, that's when things get ugly.

well im sure every one on Veeky Forums has all very non standard western fantasy some where lying around, on a more serious note read lots of mythology diggin deep in norse can be fun look at blood borne (video game) but i recomend looking at some not so well known just for insperation, also think about what has already been done.

thats my tips but i dont know if they are good as no one knows about my own setting

40k/10

I would legitimately like to know if you are trolling or not. I hate to be a dick but you gotta go back to the drawing board. You can't take too much from a single setting user

>renamed elves
>More Elves
>Dwarves
>Humans
>Orcs and Goblins
>A Great War

I literally could not be less interested.

Just replace the Eldritch with the demons, you are pretty much using the Eldritch as primordial demonic chaos like in Babylonian myth.