/cyoag/ CYOA General

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Fuck that I want to be an adventurer

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How's this?

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Why did the last one get pruned?

So you're a fucking mod or what?

Don't anger God

god's a cunt

slightly stale oc

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Rolling, i guess

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Why aren't you posting the rest of it?
Fuck it, build to end all builds coming through!

>[WARNING]
The following build includes needlessly long winded autism and dangerous amounts of cringe.
Reader discretion is advised.

>”What in tarnation.”
Oh good… The first person I've met this entire time is Yosemite Sam…
These mirages are getting weirder each day.
>”Don't jump like that when someone talks to you!”
Well maybe you shouldn't suddenly start talking to a man who's been fucking lost alone in some weird desert for longer than he can fucking remember!
>“...reincarnate…”
I'm a what?
>”...the pathway…”
What pathway?
>”...Guardians of Guidance…”
Who of what?
>”...but need to move fast.”
What? Why? You just said like 5 different things that don't even remotely under-
>”I’ll assume you're not an idiot.”
That's flattering, but probably not a great move on your part.

[Sacrament Banter and Commentary]
>”You've been out here for too long, the world is leeching off you.”
Gross.
But okay, I'll just try to keep up.
I enjoy having a sense of self…
>Starlight Chasis -Follow Infinity-
These guys seem okay…
Though “King Omega” seems like a pretty stupid sounding name for an absolute spirit of evil.
Aksha sounds like really fucking neat ability and the Abyss Book sounds like this place’s version of the Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy, which is something I'd love to have.
All the same… Protecting all of civilization is a pretty big responsibility…
Not sure if I'm up for that kind of burden, tell me about the others.
>Dusk Mirror -Twice Born, Once Lived-
Ooooh… I've always been incited and drawn to the concept of duality.
>”...fouring it…”
That's… That's not a word. I get what you mean, but you could have just said “increasing it to the fourth power” or something like that.
Regardless, I'm not sure I'm on board with having an “anti-me” running around.
What else you got?

>Shear Point -Shatter Reality-
And the award for the most badass sounding Sacrament goes to…
Okay, I think I like this one the best so far.
>Inner Gate
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Behold these gates, the first one plain and old
Behold these gates, the second forged of gold
The gate of old spells out disgrace and shame
The one of gold cries out my noble name
I challenge death to meet me at this gate
I challenge Odin to pronounce my fate
And if I thrive I've overcome this land
But if I fail I'll die a worthy man
Ahem, sorry. Got a song stuck in my head...
Anyway, having access to reshaping reality is right up my alley. Plus, I get a neat hat!
I'm going to need to learn what these “Laws” are though…
Having rules I must follow without knowing what they is gonna be pretty fucking annoying.
Either way, I'm feeling this one the most, but tell me the rest just in case.
>Clockwork Dais -Forever Comes Never-
Oh hey, time manipulation and traversing! I dig it!
>”Before the Doom…”
Okay, that REALLY fucking sounds like something I should know about…
Fuck it, whatever keep going. I'll figure it at some point.
>Singularity Amoxis
Aaaaawww… I came too late for the badass castle to still be in decent shape?
Man…
Hmm… I actually like this one a lot too…
I'll try to decide whether I like it better than Shear Point as you continue.
>Eternal Comet -Deign to Rule-
“Deign to Rule?” I like where this is going…
Fuck… I want to be King of creation…
But losing touch with its inhabitants may not be worth t-
>Muddler
Wait, does “remove the corrupting effects” mean I won't have to worry about losing touch with my humanity?!
If so, I think I may have found my Sacrament.
Tell me the last two while I mull all this over…

What appeals to you as an adventurer?

>Temperance De Mort -Ab Aeterno-
...Am I still allowed to pick a Sacrament if I can't pronounce its name?
>“This was the Doom…”
Oh, okay that answer that question.
This sounds like an important cause and something I might actually be willing to should-
>”You must temper Death.”
...How?
What the fuck does that even mean?
Pretty sure I shouldn't take on a goal I can't even understand; that's even worse than having to follow rules I don't know!
Just tell me about this “Ordinance” thing and I'll try to decide…
>Ordinance
Wait, why does this one cost diddlies?
Ehhh… The knick knacks are cool, but I think I'll hold on to my doodlies and pick one of the sacraments I liked.

[Sacrament]
>Eternal Comet -Deign to Rule-
Though I deeply fear losing touch with the inhabitants of creation, if the Universe needs a King, I shall take up the Crown.
Even if the Muddler can't keep me from growing beyond my subjects, perhaps I can use the Rite of Power to elevate those I care for enough to join me as I transcend…
And if that can’t be done, I’ll just do my best to drink it sparingly and prolong my ability to empathize with others for as long as possible.

>”Man, you was crying out like a bitch in heat!”
No shit! You try having the power to rule creation shoved inside you and tell me how it feels.
Also, who taught you how to speak English? You like some kind of cosmic hick. Take some time to learn a smidge of grammar, why dontcha?
Goddammit, now you've got me doing it too!
>I” guess you got questions.”
Why yes I do. Do I get to have some answers to them finally?
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Okay so what I'm getting is that I'm currently standing on several thousand universes -are they alright? I haven't been like, wandering around crushing universes this whole time, have I?- and that I'm apparently “The Best of Humanity.”
Alright, I guess I can dig it.

Pretty surprised you guys didn't grab David Bowie or one of the other awesome people that died recently, but whatever. I'm King of the Universe now, what right do I have to complain?

[Mentor Banter and Commentary]
>”The Ageless One had just killed The Forever King.”
That does not sound like something you should be able to do to a guy who is literally called “The Forever King.” Whatever, I'm King now, what do I care?
>”...even I, the Huntress of Stars…”
Ah, was wondering if you'd ever introduce yourself.
Nice to meet you, Huntress if Stars, I'm… Uhhh… Fuck, what was my name again? Hmm… Screw it, I’ll just come up with a new one. I am… Vasiliás, the newly arisen King of the Universe. Yeah, that sounds king-ish…
>”You see that village and the waterfall?”
Ah, yes. Another part of the Desert I probably can't approach without somehow walking in the opposite fucking direction.
>”But, we need to pair you with a mentor.”
Wait, what? Who the hell are we going to find that can teach me how to be the King of the Universe? I thought part of the point was that I was the only one!
>”...you'll have to track them down.”
What?
>”Don't die before you find them.”
What?! I can still die?! Wait, where are you going? Huntress? As your King I order you to come back and explain yourself!
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Okay, I'm sorry, please come help me. I have no fucking idea what I'm doing...
>Pirate King Bones
Nope.
Nope nope nope nope nope.
I love pirates as much as the next guy, but I make it a point not to trust anyone who doesn’t have skin.
And I ain’t keen on going anywhere that’s known as a “city of rapists.”
Or teaming up with any rapists to begin with.
Next!
>Floop
FUCKING CHRIST!
NO!
Just… No.
Are they all horrific monsters? I’m getting less keen on this mentor thing by the second…

Murder, looting, glory.

In that order.

>I'm King of the Universe now
I'm Mary Poppins! Y'all!

>Divinity Laheera Rose of the Aux-Luberum
...Why in the name of all creation did you wait until after the nightmare fuel to bring up the gorgeous cosmic elf? I swear to god, Huntress...
Well anyway, I take back the comment about finding someone to train me to be King of the Universe being impossible. I honestly kind of love her already. Diplomacy over violence, ascension through raw love, and absolutely and undeniably gorgeous.
...What’s the catch?
Alrighty, goal established; beat the beautiful Queen at her own game and stay beside her into eternity.
I’m in, but I guess I’d better here about the other options just to be sure…
>Lich King Deeja
No.
>Lady Wilhelmina Hohenzollern
Meh.
I ain’t into horse pussy.
>The Librarian Minevra of Hexbridge
I’m noticing a bit of a pattern with these Mentors…
All the male ones are horrific monsters, but all the women are kind and just.
Minevra sounds like lovely company, but doesn’t compare to Laheera.
I really do hope that I can find a way to help her deal with these Denar pricks and try to retrieve her book…

[Mentor]
>Her Highness, the First of the Aux-Luberum Dysnasty
>Divinity Laheera Rose of the Aux-Luberum
>Royal Consort of Heaven and Protectorate of the Council of a Trillion
Holy shit that's a mouthful. I hope I can just call her Laheera…
There really was no contest here for me. She’s kind, cunning, and Divinity. I can't think of anyone more suited to teach newly appointed King of the Universe.
Actually come to think of it… Does she out rank me?
Regardless, I'm sure that under her tutelage, we can figure out a way to deal with Nightfall.
It should serve as an excellent learning experience to prepare me for her final test as well.
I'll need to make sure that I don't let the luxuries and prestige I'll receive in Harmonie go to my head, or I may never be able to claim the Holy Queen as my own.

Really digging the chuuni names.

”Boring” she says… Bitch, I can't afford anything that isn't free and a nice train ride sounds fantastic after how long I've been walking around. Wait, what the hell kind of money do they even use here? Is that what these dingalings are?

[Weapons Banter and Commentary]
>”Great! You’re lookin’ a lot better.”
Ah, well that’s a reli-
Wait, what the fuck did I look like before?
>”See, these aren't exactly the safest waters.”
...Well I kinda assumed as much. What with this being a desert and all, I'd be surprised if these were any kind of “waters.”
But nevermind, let me see the toys!
>Thunderbane
Not a huge fan of maces and this sounds really unsafe to use around allies…
>Dragonskin Bow
Dragon Empire? That sounds badass. Shame the bows too short for my liking…
>Mourning Day
Now this is more like it!
I've always been a fan of swords and the sun. Being able to toss it and summon it bad is twice as awesome.
>Shield of Black Fame
Looks pretty damn cool, but not really my thing.
>Valence Musket
That's fucking force to be reckoned with right there. I've always wanted an alchemy/chemistry gun. Tempting, very tempting…
>Excalibur
You have Excalibur… THE Excalibur?
You're going to have to try really fucking hard to top that.
>Spear Eterna
Nifty, but doesn't compare to Excalibur.
>Eon’s Bow
Not as good as Excalibur.
>Shield of Dragon’s Bane
You said the Dragon Empire fell, right?
Then what good does a heavy ass shield do me if there aren't any more dragon emperors for it to protect me from?
I think we both know what I want…

[Weapons]
>Excalibur (-17 Doodads)
This is literally the sword of the greatest king known to mankind. As King of the Universe it only makes sense that I should inherit it.
I hope I can prove myself to be worry of it…

[Magic Banter and Commentary]
>Sandshaper
Very interesting and possibly devastatingly powerful.
If I'm in the Desert. I'm not sure how often I'll be outside here so I should probably pick something more reliable.
>Kinetomancy
Powerful, but not quite flashy enough for my taste...
>Halo Wings
Hmmm… A king should always be resplendent and heavenly. Them making a decent shield is promising as well.
>Cyclonus
Ehhhh… Definitely useful, but I'm not really feeling it.
>Mindbreaker
Dominating entire armies, eh?
Fuck that's going to be hard to pass up...
>Watcher (Scry)
Boring.
Moving on.
>Lotus Flame
Fire that burns things out of existence and allows me to reach enlightenment out of my God form?
That's quite an enticing bit of magic...
>Portal Attachment
...I feel like I've heard of something like this before…
Hey, is there anywhere around here we could get some cake? I'm suddenly craving cake...
>Energy Sink
Being able to drain, especially if it heals and empowers myself, has always been a bit of a fantasy of mine
>Skinchanger
Altering my appearance, especially if allows me increase my size, is quite an attractive option...
>Graviton
This seems dangerously powerful…
But I can't help but feel like harnessing the power of the Doom could be bad news for everyone...
>Icelorn
More of a fire and lightning guy myself, but I can see why this kind of power would be appealing.

[Magic]
Lotus Flame (-27 Doodalies)
Fire and tranquility.
Destruction and inner harmony.
If that doesn't sound like an excellent power for a king, I don't know what does.

[Companions Banter and Commentary]
>”You're… different.”
…
Good different or bad different?
>”You got a really bright soul for some reason.”
Probably has something to do with being King of the Universe, but go on.
Oh fuck yes! Let's force some people to become my friends! Lemme see, lemme see!
>”All of them have stat boxes…”
Do I have a stat box?
Anyway let’s see who we have here…

Fell asleep yesterday listening to ear eating, saw that some ppl had some unanswered questions for me in the last thread.

>Wait, YOU're the one responding to my challenge to make a gang rape CYOA? Expected, but somehow disappointing.
No, would have used my name if it was me and I'm way more perverted and creative to just make a CYOA about gang rape.

>What we looking at lewd daddy?
Well I was going to make Battle Sluts, gladiatory sex combat CYOA but I forgot about it and started to make a lewd bully CYOA, your a school student and in that universe everyone has super powers, most super powers are quite weak. However you don't have any power and one girl at your school starts to sexually bully you, it's not like she likes you or anything idiot! You get to choose witch girl bullies you, like the rich bitch with mind control or the super smug loli with super strength. Will also be some options to what they will do to you and other stuff. Will make Battle Sluts and the bully CYOA, so they will be released almost at the same time. After that I will work on a top secret project.

[All Grades Are Subjective and Do Not Reflect The Overall Quality of The Companion, Only Their Appeal To Me Specifically]
>Hoh-Jo
>Grade: B
She sounds like a powerful ally and the kind of girl that's just plain to be around.
Should be especially fun to practice my Rite of Power dominating her as well…
Quick question though: Why doesn't she have nipples?
>Daliah and Urshka
>Grade: C
Seems like a nice kid, but I'm not sure I like the idea of her following me around with an Elder Dragon (again, I thought the Dragon Empire fell, why is this guy still around?).
Even if she has access to legendary sorcery, I can bring myself to put a child into whatever crazy nonsense I'm bound to get into…
>Arya
>Grade: B+
Cute Sun Spirit?
Possibly crazy and/or scheming?
Sign me the fuck up!
I look forward to walking with her as we travel and standing beside her as she burns our foes with radiant flames in my name.
>Jyakaras
>Grade: C
She's a rather one note kind of girl. Doesn't seem like she'd be able to carry much of a conversation that didn't revolve around hunting…
>Princess Lusteria
>Grade: B
Ah, fellow champion of justice and valor. Even if our fates don't become bound, I hope I can aid her world.
I'm honestly pretty tempted to pick her for the simple reason that Gulg is adorable and I want to snuggle him…
Also feel a little mislead about the nature of her character considering she has the word “Lust” in her name…
>Andrea
>Grade: B+
Holy shit, a person with a normal goddamn name!
But she's so blatantly evil…
But she's also hot…
But she's evil…
But so hot…
Fuck. This one’s harder that the rest.
>Sedana
>Grade: D+
>”Bow in fear.”
Excuse me?
>”You look upon a God puny mortal.”
Oh ho ho ho! So that's how it's gonna be, is it?
Huntress, hold the dossiers! I'm going to go see if the Blade of Kings is sharp enough to cut through bitches who need to learn their fucking place…

>Jack Wright
>Grade: A
I love this guy. He reminds me of myself and I'd definitely want to fight beside him and grab a drink afterwards. That being said…
I think he might be hotter than me, so that's a deal breaker in and of itself.
>Garret
>Grade: D-
>”Garret is- whew, did it get hot in here?”
Well he's disqualified right off the bat now too!
Probably for the best anyway…
I find his nipples… Intimidating…
>Tyr
>Grade: D
That certainly is a big… Thing.
I'm a sucker for fluffy critters, but the razor sharp teeth kind of outweighs that a tad…
>Avesta
>Grade: C-
An interesting guy, I'll give him that… But he's a tad spooky for my liking…
>Rina
>Grade: A+
Awww… She's adorable-
>”...The Unnameable God of Death.”
...What?
“This won't end well.”
What won't end well?
>”Errr… Goodluck!”
What?! Where are you going?! Huntress? Huntress?!
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[Companions]
>Arya (-15 Diddlies)
Since it seems I can't harness the power of the sun on my own (without Mourning Day anyway, but once again; Excalibur beats all other options), then having a true friend who can will be a comforting warmth in my life.
I also can't help but want to uncover what lies beneath those beautiful eyes of hers...
>Andrea (-15 Doodlies)
A mysterious and powerful darkness to match Arya’s light. Between the two, I shall endeavor to stand as the dusk and dawn between them.
I'd also be lying if I said I didn't find the concept of the two of us having an otherworldly connection that keeps bringing the two of us together fairly enticing.
>Rina (-15 Danglies)
I realize I've essentially comprised a collection of possibly insane, if not outright evil women as my traveling companions and that by adding Rina to the mix I've invited the Unnamed God of Death to my side as well, but can you really blame me? She's adorable and maybe in her new, younger incarnation I can help her to become a less malicious and feared God.
Plus, who doesn't want a God on their side?

>Rina
>Grade: A+
I knew you were my nigger!

Alright, I've chosen my Companions and know all their “stats,” but I still don't know mine…
I guess I'll just add theirs together and see how powerful they are on their own.
[Total Companion Stats]
>STR: 11 ½
>SPEED: 12 ½
>INT: 23
>WIT: 22
>MAG: 24 ½
>SOR: 14 ½
There. Those look like some big numbers.
...I think.

[Quests Commentary and Banter]
>”...but now we got’s to get ‘er done.”
Get what done?
>”Welcome to the Tree of Rebirth…”
Wait, what?
Where'd the town go? When the fuck did we get here? Actually didn't you ditch me when you realized Rina was heading toward us? I did not think it was possible for me to feel anymore confused today, but looks like I was wrong.
>”Here, you'll seal your pact.”
What pact? You mean the Sacrament? I thought we already did that.
>”But it isn't that easy see...”
Of course it isn't…
What do I have to do?
…
So I'm the only individual of my Sacrament and the only Member in Eon’s Order?
Well aren't I just the specialist of snowflakes.
When do I get to start being King?
This whole desert is starting to seem like it loves jerking me around…
>”Till then, our contract is complete.”
Contract? When did we have any kind of contract?
>”Now, I bid you farewell and…”
Wait, you're just leaving me here? At least tell me how to get back to the train to get to Harmonie and Laheera!
>”Goodbye”
And… there she goes…
Fuck.
Well Vasiliás, looks like you have form a pact with this tree and pick a quest to try conquer once you've completed your training…
And you're probably going to be talking to yourself the whole time like a nut job.
Behold and tremble before the might of the sole adherent to the Eternal Comet, wielder of the mightiest Sword of Kings, and King of the Universe itself.
Standing alone in front of tree completely lost and confused…
Alright, let's see which one of these feels right for me…

>Quest For The Ages: Find The -Oracle of Nath-
Hmmm…
Definitely seems important. Poor woman’s probably lost, confused, and afraid. I can definitely empathize with her on that much.
It'll be a hell of a search with so little go on, but it sounds like it'd be one that'd allow me to see some truly wondrous things and people…
It honestly sounds like the safest option, but that's not necessarily a bad thing…
>Threat of a Generation: Search and Destroy -The Scrolls of Thu’um-
Well, okay. I'll admit that this definitely sounds like an exceptionally dangerous catastrophe waiting to happen. But if I get to choose which one of these I'm gonna be doing, I'm picking one that doesn't seem so… bleak and dreary.
>Unspeakable Horror: Survive The -Yellow Samurai-
…
This it.
>Thrill of a Lifetime: Locate -The Temple of Al-Asir-
Sounds like something worth doing but not something that'll be pretty hard to do while I'm “marked.”
>Save The World: Prevent -The Summoning of Urza-
Once again, definitely worthy of attention, but not something I can do while being tracked.

[Quest]
>Unspeakable Horror
>Survive The -Yellow Samurai-
I don't know why, but the second I saw that name, I knew defeating him was what I was meant to do…
“A false manifestation of a being known as the Yellow King,” huh?
Heh. I'd have preferred “Golden King,” but I guess you can't pick this kind of thing yourself.
Fuck knows if I'm right about this, but this Samurai and that name speak to me in a way that almost feels… nostalgic.
I guess I'll see whether I'm right about this once the time comes.

For now, at least I have a vague idea of what I'm supposed to do.
First I have to find my way back to that village. Then it's Southwest from there to reach Laheera and start my training. According to the Huntress, Rina was heading toward me anyway, so I'll see if I can manage to meet up with her before I board the train.
I'll learn everything I can from Laheera and what I can't learn from her I'll teach myself. I'll need to master using the Rite to Power and wielding Excalibur alongside sharpening my mind and tongue.
I'm sure I'll run into Arya and Andrea at some point during this time, so hopefully I can get them to assist with dealing with Nightfall.
After that, once I've mastered my trades I'll challenge the Holy Queen to a game and upon defeating her, ask for her hand in marriage.
No other woman could be worthy to stand beside the Vasiliás, “The Yellow King” of creation and I shall make her mine.
And finally, before taking my throne beside my beloved queen, I'll find him before he finds me.
I will slay this false reflection of myself once and for all.
I should probably also figure out what the hell to do with these last 11 Dingies…

Put your trip on so I can filter you ZBG

Holy fucking hell

149 posts in the last thread, a third images and a third just rage at the op
damn impressive

I'm not posting about my CYOAs, asking for feedback, or just generally being a slut for attention.
I'm just posting my autistic as fuck builds, so there's no need to put my name it.
The trip stays off.
Get over it.
My autism truly knows no bounds.
Wait till you see I'm working on for the Royal Revival update...

Well since nobody else is doing anything....

By the way I ain't got a clue if this is the right order. Google is a cunt and decided to zip the files.

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You got
It right bud, now worries.

~ Fin ~

Someone post Unreal Fortress please

This cock of mine glows with an awesome power!
It's burning shaft tells me to jizz in you!
Take this! My Love, my anger, and all of my herpes!
Shining PENIS! GO! GO! GO!

Dagon's Bane, not Dragons Bane. You mongoloid.

Anybody got the second page of that doggo cyoa that was posted at the end of the last thread?

Hi, Tok...

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We hold these truths to be self-evident: that Tok has shitty tastes in mind control, that the best kind of mind control is after you first take control of them when they want you to do it again WITHOUT your influence, and that all lewd CYOAs are not created equal.

So, since we learnt last time that [SYMBOLS] aren't your soul or whatevs so you can spend them all, lets do that.
Line 2, paragraph 2,
>But, which (sic) each wonderous (sic) sight
Should be "with" and "wondrous".
Sounds a lot like Sea of Sand so that's neat.
Line 1, paragraph 2 under Sacrament
>You're very lucky you to still have
Would remove that "you".
Last paragraph, line 1
>You could chose (sic)
Choose.

Okay it's pretty clear I'm much too stupid and unimaginative to enjoy this. I get nothing.
Starlight chasis, second last paragraph, line 6
>Also taked (sic) with fighting
Tasked.
Next line,
>Eldrich (sic)
Eldritch.
Next line,
>defy explenation (sic)
Explanation.

Dusk mirror, paragraph 2, line 1
>Followrs (sic)
Followers.
Next line
>opoosites (sic)
Opposites.
Last paragraph, line 2
>You (sic) fates
Your.

Shearpoint, intro to the hat, last line
>hat decays aftet (sic)
After.

Clockwork Dias, item, line 4
>automaticaly (sci)
Automatically.
Last line,
>particuarly (sic)
Particularly.
Also you messed up the title of the thing. The title says "Dias", the body text says "Dais".
Paragraph 1, line 6, an extra space between Dais and the full stop. Same thing on the second last line.
Paragraph 2, second last line
>, buring (sic) their
Burning.
paragraph 3, line 3
>your whole bady (sic)
Body.

Eternal Comet, Muddler, line 3
>Eldrich (sic)
Eldritch. I'm assuming this is intentional at this point so I won't bring it up again.
Second last line
>small does (sic)
Doses.

Collar of the infinite eyes, line 3
>andy (sic) number
Any.

I honestly have no idea what I read, what any of the sacraments do or where I am, what the world is, anything. I don't know what I'm supposed to do.
So the Clockwork Dais power is basically the Traveller cyoa?
Eternal Coment sounds boring. I want to earn power, not be given it.
I was going to pick number 3 because it's high personal power, but
>Temperance de Mort
appeals to my special snowflake-ness.

This might not be a turbo autistic build but i want to share it.
>Sacrament
Temperance de mort
Damn, this sacrament tugs badly at my heartstrings. I will try my best to carry the hope (and hatred) of the old world.

>Mentor
Lich king Deeja
A master on everything death related seems to be a great place to start my quest on tempering death. He also seeks to prevent a second Doom, preventing such tragedy to ever happening again is paramount.
After all this is over this poor guy deserves a dose of muddler so i might need to find the recipe. But i am afraid that he becomes the monster that he once was instead of getting him back to pre-necromancer sanity. Also what i am supposed to see under his robe?

>Weapons
Shield of black flame
The blade of hope is all the weapon i will ever need, however the shield of malice is going to be a great burden on my mind if i use it all the time. This neat little shield will do nicely.

>Powers
Graviton
A Truth that was created after the Doom swallowed all is going to give great insight on how to prevent another one to happen. Of course, it is still a mighty power that it will prove of great use on my fights.

Frostlorn
Ice elementalism is one of my favourite kinds of magic. A bit situational of course, but in the proper enviroment i am going to be a force to be reckoned with.

Halo wings
It gives great mobility and an additional weapon and shield. Very versatile.

>Companions
Rina by the shadow
Not only she is a cute, she is also the reincarnation of the unnamed god of death. Clearly essential on my quest of tempering death. I will make sure that she won't suffer any danger under my vigilance and that she has a healthy amount of headpats.
>Quest
Prevent the summoning of Urza
With our capabilities this should be doable. It is also good to consider the amount of insight about Deeja and events transpired here with the help of frostlorn.

I got 6 things left, it vexes me.
Mystery box when?

So,
>Magical sword that does something

>the best of humanity would always watch over us
Batfleck snickering.gif
There are so many words and names of people thrown at me and I have no idea what anything means. This is probably good in Dark Souls but it doesn't work in a cyoa. I'll never learn what anything is.

Mentor, paragraph 2, line 2
>a legitemate (sic) God
Legitimate.
Pirate King Bones, line 8
>his humanity He
Needs a full stop before "He".
Also, with most textboxes, you need to move the text a couple pixels to the right. They're hugging the edge. You should really look to change the colors around the loredump boxes on the right, too.

Floop, paragraph 2, line 3
>But,what
Add a space
line 5
>almostuntouchable
Split up the word.

Laheera Rose, paragraph 1, line 2
>bought (sic) hope
Brought.
Line 9
>A legitemate (sic
Legitimate. Do you not copy-paste your text into Word before posting your cyoa?

I'm not teaming up with a rapist so Bones is out. You say he's "staunch in his beliefs", but what are his beliefs? You say his "knowledge is legendary", but what does is he knowledgeable on?

So, who is the Ageless one? Who is the Forever King?

>No mentor
There's none I particularly like, and the majority of their description is loredumps instead of giving them personality. I also don't like the whole "go find them first". Picking a mentor doesn't really give you anything, it's more like a letter of recommendation then you have to try to figure out where they are.
With no information on the dangers of the world, where you are, distance to the mentor, what the environment you have to traverse is like, there's no way for me to know the difficulty of finding a mentor. There's so little information available, and so many names and organizations made up on the spot that isn't explained.
I still have no idea what's going on. Something about being dead except not really, and there's no threat or objective to do or work towards. Except you're apparently a hero?

Why does Rise keep being posted constantly? Fuck dude, I've seen it so many times in the past five threads or so.

>Fresh OC
>Great CYOA
>DEEPEST LORE
>Rina a cute
In my opinion it might be because of this.

1. Biggish Cyoa
2. Recent Cyoa
3. Quiet and his secretlore shenanigans gets the autists a quivering
i mean it just makes sense user
give it a week or two

Before I forget, the waifu mentor says she can move to other worlds. I thought you had to be alive/use a Humanity on a bonfire to do that? So how can she do that if she's in the Desert which is where dead people is?
I also don't have any clue what the rules of "the Doom" are. So, everything died, except not really? And also the Doom happened "millions of years" ago, based of DJ's description?
Why would DJ want to mentor us? Why does the narrator know about DJ, and can make him mentor us? On that topic how does the narrator know that DJ came before the Doom if she died and lost her memories (or did not, seriously, I have no idea what the rules of the Doom are)?
Why do I need to graduate from a mentor?
Lady Wilhelmina's only personality trait in her entire description is "she is a kind person who will listen to you".
Another thing, what do I actually gain from having a mentor? And why do I "need" to be paired up with one?
I mean, the Librarian does nothing but let me read books.
How does a library know an enemy is coming? And wouldn't many of them die by the "dangerous waters"?

DJ, line 5
>binrg (sic) justice
Bring.

Wilhelmina, lorebox 2, line 7
>journery.
Journey.

Librarian, line 5-6
>his his
Remove one.
Line 7
>His daughter, no (sic)
Now.

fuck yea i've been getting back into recettear

Rolled 2, 1, 3 = 6 (3d4)

>Telekinesis
>Teleportation
They don't combine as well as full invisibility and teleportation, but they're both very versatile powers.
>Regeneration
Mostly just to prevent permanent damage.

>KS-23
OH SHIT, TELEPORTING SHOTGUN!
>Armor
OOHH DOUBLE SHIT, INVINCIBLE TELEPORTING SHOTGUN!
Also, Telekinesis is my friend here.

>Belarus
Neutering two side effect rolls seems like a pretty good deal.

Rolling 3d4 for options 2-5, with the third being for rerolls.

>Rina a cute
Tbh I underestimated how many of you would be into this. I thought that the best girl rankings would go something like:

>Sedana
>Andrea/Arya/Hoh-jo
>Lusteria/Rina

But nope.

>Mfw I saw this

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did you not read the description for armour?

That only matters if you need hands to weild guns - and I'm not one of those no-TK faggots.

INVINCIBLE TELEPORTING LOLI SHOTGUN ain't bad.
For most mutants, I'll probably just teleport into a fully armored battle hug, then telekinesis some handcuffs onto them. Shotgun only comes out in the worst emergencies.

It's really good and needs discussion to unearth it's secrets

>Be mutant in the zone
>Doing mutant stuff
>Suddenly out of nowhere a little girl wearing a armor bigger than her hugs you in to submission
10/10 build

> menu and stats
> exp. points

Spend points per year on anti-aging stats, like efficiency of cell division and detoxification... or simplier forms like Years Aged per Year, to create a exponentially expanding lifespan that never meets an end

eventually enter superhuman region of traits, besides unaging immortality

>includes needlessly long winded autism and dangerous amounts of cringe.
I didn't think so. Was fun and entertaining to read, and wasn't too long at all. Then again this is my CYOA so I might be a bit biased.

I don't think there's a need to have the intro bit on all pages. It just feels weird to have it, I thought the narrator started repeating herself.
>we're still reeling from the doom
How? It happened millions of years ago according to DJ?
>"I wasn't expecting to... you know"
I actually don't. Does she mean "give weapons away"?
Why does Thunderbane's boom not vaporize the user's organs? Or our eardrums?
The Dragonskin Bow makes no sense. If the drawweight is high, how is the range short? How is it fast to fire?
Without knowing the drawweight it's impossible to know if you can even use the bow.
Valence musket doesn't seem effective in combat. Cancer takes months to kill. How expensive is ammo? How much ammo comes with it? Can I buy ammo in any city? Can I make ammo myself?
How does Eon's bow - which is simple wood, from what I can tell - kill Dragons with thick armor when the bow says it can't pierce thick armor? How can it fire farther than the other bow?
In Kinetomancy, you say "max force" then followed by pounds. Pounds measure mass, right? Or do you mean pound-force? Why not use the standard unit of Newtons?

Mourning day, line 5
>will immedeately (sic)
Immediately.
Excalibah, line 7
>tell its (sic) very
It's.
Eon's bow, line 6
>eldritch horrors
Eldritch (capital E).
Spear eterna, line 2
>Its (sic incredibly
It's.
Line 4
>Its (sic) also
It's.
Cyclonus, line 9
>to crossing distances.
I'm pretty sure this should be "cross"
Watcher (scry), line 1
>self-explenatory (sic
Self-explanatory
Seriously. You could have at least run the text through Word.
Lotus flame, line 2-3
>It [is] the flame
Add the "is".
Line 5
>extraordinaly
Extraordinarily.
Last line
>recokned (sic) with
Reckoned
Generally remove all the "you'll like this!" etc. intros. See Portal attachment and Cyclonus. It accomplishes absolutely nothing but waste lines.
Energy sink, line 5
>postive
Positive.

So I already have a weapon from the sacrament so I don't need that.
>Kinetomancy (82)

>Also what i am supposed to see under his robe?
Cause I like your build, here you go.

Also, can I just add that Deeja's identity is one of the EASIEST thing in the game to find out. Remember, he's from the same Earth you are! There have been only a handful of humans responsible for the deaths of millions!

>Pounds measure mass, right?
No, pound is a measure of weight and weight is a force.

And yes, the Dragonskin bow is weird, but it's magic so I ain't gotta explain shit nigger.

> If the drawweight is high, how is the range short? How is it fast to fire?
Arrows are heavy. Work well in close range as the weight of the arrow adds to the weight of the bow. This is a bow made of semi-ideal materials, which eliminates AR and frictional forces.

>How does Eon's bow - which is simple wood, from what I can tell - kill Dragons?
Eon was a legend. When he used the bow, he could punch a hole through a mountain.

>How? It happened millions of years ago according to DJ?
Time isn't the same for immortals.

>Why does Thunderbane's boom not vaporize the user's organs? Or our eardrums?
Cause you're holding it duh.

>Valence musket doesn't seem effective in combat.
It is ionizing radiation. It'll begin to cause necrosis immediately and cause a lot of pain. The wound from this btw would be 3x more debilitating than a normal weapon due to the massive internal injuries it would cause straight away. I've written about ammo in the description.

Also, thanks for all the comments on the writing. English is like my third language, and I type directly into Photoshop. I'll be sure to put your comments into the CYOA.

Btw, I'll get around to answering your questions.

HES DONALD TRUMP

It's the same bullshit that fuckwit pulled with A Quiet CYOA that you idiots fall for so he can jerk off to (you)s.

Cyber Stalin?! But we ended his mechanized tyranny!

Post that UF cyoa of yours please.

Sacrament 3 says you have to obey the laws of physics. Why doesn't Skinchanger? Why can it discard the law of conservation of mass?
Graviton is not a new invention if it was created during the Doom which happened millions of years ago.
Wouldn't a weapon enchanted with Graviton be unusable since it attracts everything? It would be a magnet, but attracted to everything.
How has the companion folder been out of commission since the Doom which, again, happened millions of years ago?

Energy sink, line 6
>also absordb (sic)
Absorb.

Companions, paragraph 2, line 2
>out of comission (sic)
Commission
Line 4
>there wzas (sic)
Was.

>No companions
Especially given the "tied your destiny together" and we just know this means something edgy when it's you.
Also you're probably going to be banned for the nip slip on the first companion.
This was the point where I just stopped reading because you're never going to explain anything, just dump more and more "lore" that means nothing. So little of this cyoa is actually explained. I still don't know what anything is.
Parts of the cyoa looks good. That's the only positive thing I can say. You don't spend any points before the third page, the costs are so high you can't get much. All to spend points on are weapons, magic (that isn't properly explained - how many spells can I cast?) and companions.
The needless repetition of the intro bit on all pages is just a waste.

I'm sure the cyoa is good if you have the information you're keeping in your mind but what you posted isn't enjoyable. Not to me at least. I just get annoyed with almost every single option because nothing is explained, there's no hints. It's just words that mean nothing.

Still in progress.

Nope.

Yeah, I guess what we really need is more Waifu cyoas made in Paint with the same 4-5 archetypes. We definitely don't want a good looking adventure cyoa with actual discussion.

>There have been only a handful of humans responsible for the deaths of millions!
>Hitler is my teacher!?
Sounds like the title of an anime or something i guess the solar elves were a clue that i missed.

Congrats on being more autistic than ZBG

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>Why doesn't Skinchanger?
It's not breaking COM. There's a limit, and all that extra mass comes from somewhere. That's actually skinchanger's mystery thing.

>Graviton is not a new invention if it was created during the Doom which happened millions of years ago.
Again, you're the first human since the Doom. This is all for you, and you're the first to get these options. Same for the companions folder.

>Wouldn't a weapon enchanted with Graviton be unusable since it attracts everything?
Incorrect! A common misconception about gravity is that it attracts everything in all directions equally!

This is not true. In fact, the attraction of gravity is but a consequence of the geometry of spacetime. You can twist the shape and density of your gravitational force attractors (your energy constructs made from graviton energy), and, with a bit of maths, you can direct it anyway you want.

Gravity isn't real. It's just a consequence of the shape of curved spacetime.

Here's a good series on gravity: youtube.com/playlist?list=PLFeEvEPtX_0S6vxxiiNPrJbLu9aK1UVC_

Haha yea he's hitler.

Setting: Space Opera
Themes: Adventure, Reincarnation
Bouns: Transport, Fellowship, Compendium

Damn, I thought maybe he was Ghengis Khan. I almost want to take literally Hitler

>Hitler lost his memory and became a hero
>Almost gets killed by a necromancer but recovers his memories mindfucking him
>Achieves lichdom
>Tries to prevent the doom but fails
>Now he takes you as a pupil
>Eventually you work together to prevent the second doom saving countless lifes
Wow.

>You can twist the shape and density of your gravitational force attractors (your energy constructs made from graviton energy), and, with a bit of maths, you can direct it anyway you want.
So graviton is kinetomancy+++?

Location: Big City (105)
Type: Large Building (85)
Goods: Board Games x 3 (55), Books x 3 (25), Toys (20), Magical Ingredients (10), Potions (0)

Just your friendly local game store, but in a fantasy world. Of course we sell refreshments too.

Graviton is basically a power that lets you bend spacetime in any direction you want, however, you have a maximum well depth as to how strongly (deeply) you can bend it. It's a lot more than kinetomancy.

Also, was making Deeja literally Hitler not the best idea ever?

Why not just put points in the omnipotence stat if you're going to completely ignore the CYOA?

Could you expand more on the difference between kinetomancy and graviton?

I'm also curious about your comments concerning skinchanger and how that may impact a certain demonic companion

>And yes, the Dragonskin bow is weird, but it's magic so I ain't gotta explain shit nigger.
Your explanation for something not making sense it saying "it doesn't have to make sense"? That's just poor.
>Arrows are heavy
Why can't I use other arrows?
>weight of the arrow adds to the weight of the bow
Which makes it even stupider you say it can be fired quickly.
>When he used the bow
Why does what applied to him apply to us, then?
>Time isn't the same for immortals.
That has nothing to do with all the time where you say "oh we're still recovering from the Doom" despite it happening millions of years ago. It doesn't make sense.
>Cause you're holding it duh.
Why does that make us immune?
>It'll begin to cause necrosis
It says it causes cancer, not necrosis.
>The wound from this btw would be 3x more debilitating than a normal weapon
It doesn't say that.
>I've written about ammo in the description.
The description doesn't answer my questions or I wouldn't have asked them
> I type directly into Photoshop
So do I. But I still copy-paste all my text into Word. You would remove the vast majority of all the spelling mistakes I corrected from doing that.
> all that extra mass comes from somewhere. That's actually skinchanger's mystery thing.
Again, your answer is "I know it works, you don't have to know how it works".
>Again, you're the first human since the Doom. This is all for you, and you're the first to get these options. Same for the companions folder.
That doesn't answer my comment. A new invention isn't millions of years old.
>gravity, link to youtube
Okay how does that answer my question? How does it work, then? How do I direct gravity in battle? How powerful is the weapon's gravitational pull?

I have to agree on that. Somehow the revelation that Deeja is hitler makes him more attractive as a Mentor.

By the way how is the whole mystery box thing going? I am itching to know how well my build fared and to spend my 6 leftover points.