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At first I thought you mucked up the rhyming scheme in the first stanza but as I read I realized how cool it was. You stylized this poem very well, I really liked where you cut the rhyming out or the flow intentionally. As it "degrades" towards the end (and I think I'm interpreting it right when I say she's slowly returning to her voidhell?) it just becomes a more and more invigorating read. Awesome work user.
The third stanza stands out for me so much in this poem. I really like it. I guess I harp on "rhyming schemes" a lot when I mention them but (for me at least) it felt awkward to go from rhyming the 2nd and 4th line to the 1/2nd and 3/4th from stanza to stanza. I like the "crafy" feeling in this poem, the usage of "forming armor" and the cup of colors, especially notable in the last stanza "chemical compound." Nice job user.
oh man, I love that third stanza so much. There is a really well-written dark overtone throughout this entire piece that was really bringing me down (in a good way). Sorry to say I don't really have any solid criticisms other than I probably would have used some different word choice out of my own personal preference. Great job!
This is out of the box compared to the other poems I reviewed from that prompt. It actually gives a really nice feeling, like a rhyme or limerick you'd hear before bed as a kid. I kept trying to think of a different line to have for the last line in the second stanza but couldn't come up with anything. That's the only line that stands out sourly to me. But if I can't get an idea for what to replace it with, what can I even say? Haha. Good job user.
Alright, that's it for now. If by some way I've impressed you with my analyses and you really want something reviewed let me know. Great stuff everyone!
