In a house of a godless king

In a house of a godless king,
A dead star will die,
The crystal mountain begins to sing,
And the cyclops loses his eye.

The heavens begin to scream,
As oceans of hate spill in,
The silence awakens the queen,
And two-hundred cycles begin.

In the wake of a beast,
With no head and no end,
Rides the queen to the feast,
All lords knees will bend.

At the eat of the dead,
In the hall of the mouth,
Stairs colored red,
Calls the hole in the south.

The way of the sword,
The time of the light,
The law of a lord,
All end that night.

Out the rend colored blue,
He judges the worth,
For each one there's two,
A hole in the north.

Appraisal of matter,
Priced at the worst,
The words of the latter,
Anger the first.

A stirring of flies,
The toll of a bell,
The dead will now rise,
Evicted from hell.

Two princes of death,
Two legions of souls,
Decay on their breath,
Exacting their tolls.

The end of an era,
At the final turn,
The queen reigns in terra,
And watches it burn.

The race of the mind,
Take the king of nine stars,
They exit in kind,
Healing nine scars.

Da shit is this, Destiny?

What is "The Fuck," Alex?

I'll take "Shit I'm totally stealing" for 500, John.

Makes me want to bust out my degree in English to provide analysis. But I'll spare everyone and myself.

A a fellow Master in English I'd say do it.
When else are you going to be able to put it to any meaningful use?

Crossposting with only appropriate response

Hello newfriend, let me show you how you fucked up:

Jeez, /x/ is a slow board compared to Veeky Forums.

in the court of the crimson kiiing

there once was man from nantucket
with a dick so long he could suck it
he said with a grin
while wiping his chin
if my ear was a hole i would fuck it

OP here, was this bad?

It's the end of the world prophecy for my space campaign. I'm not much of a writer and this is the first rhyming thing I've ever written. I posted it on /x/ because I wanted to see if anyone might try and interpret it.

I posted it here and then went straight to sleep so I never ended up replying to anyone. I wanted to know if this would sound hokey to you guys if your DM read that off.

It's 40k...

How so?

It would to me. Hokey isn't necessarily worse than nothing, though.

I think part of the problem is that it jumps around a lot. First chunk, for instance, we have:
>House of a godless king
>dead star dying
>crystal mountain singing
>cyclops loses eye
The first two are kind of dark, the third is a bit trippy, and the fourth seems weirdly specific. The result is you kind of suspect at least some of the lines are just there to make it rhyme or be bullshittingly cryptic. Compare that to the third chunk:
>wake of beast
>no beginning, no end
>queen arriving to feast
>ohshititsthequeen.jpg
It's all literally referring to the same basic, plausible event chain, but it's also basically the same topic and tone, so it feels more like a coherent (arguably too coherent) prophecy and less like you got as far as "In the dead of the night / The prophet awakes" and then had to throw in "The pool ball is light / I like to eat steaks" because you couldn't think of anything better.

>In a house of a godless king,
Emperor, Tera
>A dead star will die,
Astronimicon
>The crystal mountain begins to sing,
Golden Throne
>And the cyclops loses his eye.
Magnus
>The heavens begin to scream,
Eye of Terror
>As oceans of hate spill in,
Chaos
>The silence awakens the queen,
Slannesh or Yneed or whatever the Neo-Eldar god is called
>And two-hundred cycles begin.
The time in which the plot is advancing
>In the wake of a beast,
Fulgrim
>With no head and no end,
His Legion mark
>Rides the queen to the feast,
Eldar Death God
>All lords knees will bend.
Ascending the Chaos gods or defeating them
>At the eat of the dead,
Dead god
>In the hall of the mouth,
Webway
>Stairs colored red,
Commoragh
>Calls the hole in the south.
The big brass doors that are being beaten on the opposite side of Commoragh
>The way of the sword,
War
>The time of the light,
ROWBOAT GIRLY MAN
>The law of a lord,
RAW BUT GONG MAN
>All end that night.
Cadia Falls
>Out the rend colored blue,
Eye of Terra
>He judges the worth,
God-Emperor
>For each one there's two,
Alpha legion is split in two, loyalist and traitor
>A hole in the north.
Mars
>Appraisal of matter,
STC found
>Priced at the worst,
Corrupted by Chaos
>The words of the latter,
STC found by chaos
>Anger the first.
Khorne
>A stirring of flies,
Nurgle
>The toll of a bell,
Bell of Lost Souls now rings eternal
>The dead will now rise,
More Nurgle
>Evicted from hell.
The first Chaos Champion is reborn
>Two princes of death,
He fights with Abaddon
>Two legions of souls,
Chaos Civil War
>Decay on their breath,
Nurgle grows stronger
>Exacting their tolls.
Inqusition fails to contain nurgle
>The end of an era,
40k is no more
>At the final turn,
2 minutes to midnight
>The queen reigns in terra,
Girly man
>And watches it burn.
Denounced as a traitor
>The race of the mind,
Is actually Alpharius
>Take the king of nine stars,
Nine points of Chaos
>They exit in kind,
Chaos expands
>Healing nine scars.
Expands then exahausts itself.

Monte Cook raped this genre for at least 10 years.
Just give it some rest.

>>Evicted from hell.
>The first Chaos Champion is reborn
>>Two princes of death,
>He fights with Abaddon
>>Two legions of souls,
>Chaos Civil War
>>Decay on their breath,
>Nurgle grows stronger
>>Exacting their tolls.
>Inqusition fails to contain nurgle
>>The end of an era,
>40k is no more
>>At the final turn,
>2 minutes to midnight
>>The queen reigns in terra,
>Girly man
>>And watches it burn.
>Denounced as a traitor
>>The race of the mind,
>Is actually Alpharius

I wasn't thinking 40k at all, but this is awesome.

What did he do? I haven't played DnD for years, not since before 4th edition came out.

Nifty