ITT: we whip up something in 5-15 minutes and rate, critique the work of others

ITT: we whip up something in 5-15 minutes and rate, critique the work of others

Hard Mode: No editing

Here's mine

Just because they're done quickly doesn't mean you have to be trite and puerile.
#neophyte

it's crap

Last two verses are good, the rest is a bit boring.

>good
Don't listen to this idiot, OP.

The well of all things
Is one which is silent
But when echoed
Great beings leap forth
Like from silos

awful

Just went and wrote this. I've been thinking a lot about the election recently.

This is a really quick first draft and it's in more of a screenplay format.

I hope it itsn't too bad.

>Hey. I haven't seen you since Yale.
Right from the beginning this is fucking dog shit. "Hurr it's supposed to be boring and typical and satirical of white male power society". Even if it weren't for that bit of trash, the greeting is all fucking wrong. The way it reads. The punctuation. The word he uses as salutation. All of it, terrible. Wouldn't read another word.

I'm going to go back over it. I think it's bad too and am going to replace it.