Disregarding all grammar and spelling errors. Is this guy's story telling ability spot on? How is it not the perfect story? (other than the content) I mean how it's displayed and written everything is self explanatory and really couldn't be much higher standing.
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He has other stories that are just as X-rated, but have an easy to follow pattern that is easy to read.
Discuss please.
NSFW writing. It's very X-rated.
I dunno man, I'm not author but I think it has some potential. Seems to follow a lot of storytelling guidelines right?
It could use some work, the structure is good, but I don't think I perfectly understand the real lust The Sex Goblin has for Michael. That could be conveyed a bit better, other than that, it's pretty much what I would define as perfection.
I could really feel each thrust, each moan, each little whimper that Michael would let out. The author definitely has a way with words. Looking forward to reading more of his work.
You can't expect a serious discussion about this right? Are you joking? I might delete my wattpad after reading that. Who writes this? It has a good pattern and everything but there's so much homoerotica in it. I even laughed. How do we discuss this in a serious manner its literal pornography of a genre I can not define.
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He has 3 more stories and they intertwine.
Wow, clearly you can't appreciate all forms of literature. You ass.
Y-you're joking right? You're defending this?
Its not art it's basically pornography in word form.
I got a virus just reading about that
It has 5200 reads... Kind of impressive desu.
How the fuck have 5200 people read this and I can't get 400 reads on mine and I've been spamming it since January?
Infectious, one might call it
How is there a virus? I'm reading it right now.
Sex sells, boyo
I really enjoyed this story to be honest. I don't know if maybe you should give it a second read through to see if you missed anything man!
nice try, [name of guy who wrote the thing]
nope
Because OP has been inflating his page like he's been inflating this thread, to wit
>14 posts
>7 schlubs
>OP of which is
no just 3 of those were mine and i was replying to people.
Can confirm. I'm a separate person who fell upon it by unfortunately frequenting Veeky Forums. It has real potential imo if the right person sees it...he will have to draw the struggle out and be more detailed but i see it!
dude just let your thread die and be free of its misery instead of prolonging its sad life by bumping it like that
It's trash. There are definitely X rated gems out there, but the subejct matter is rarely vanilla.