This poem seems too simple. Am I missing something?
I've interpreted it essentially as the reality of old age and the process of dying (likely inspired by his father's death two years prior to publication). William's was also an imagist so that explains why nothing is blatantly explained.
Is there anything else?
>they are buffeted by a dark wind
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Oh yes...very good!....very sloppy and wet my dear....hmmmmm...is that a drop of nugget I see on the rim?...hmmmm.....let me.....let me just have a little taste before the sniff my darling.......hmmmmm....hmm..yes....that is a delicate bit of chocolate my dear....ah yes....let me guess...curry for dinner?....oh quite right I am....aren't I?....ok....time for sniff.....sssssnnnnnnniiiiiiiiffffffff.....hmmm...hhhmmmmm I see...yes....yes indeed as well curry......hmmm....that fragrance is quite noticeable....yes.....onion and garlic chutney I take it my dear?.....hmmmmm....yes quite.....
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Oh I was not expecting that…that little gust my dear….you caught me off guard…yes…so gentle it was though…hmmmm…let me taste this little one…just one small sniff…..sniff…ah….ssssssnnnnnniiiiiffffffffffff…and yet…so strong…yes…the odor….sniff sniff…hmmm….is that….sniff….hmmm….I can almost taste it my dear…..yes….just…sniff….a little whiff more if you please…..ssssssnnnnnniiiiiffffffffff…ah yes I have it now….yes quite….hhhhmmmm…delectable my dear…..quite exquisite yes…..I dare say…sniff….the most pungent one yet my dear….ssssnnnnniiiifffffffffffffffffffffff….yes….
Nice.
I don't know how much longer I can browse this site
William Carlos Williams is garbage.
best brap post of all time
even got trips
checked
>Garbage
It's the Puerto Rican side bleeding through. He should have stuck to being strictly a physician.
I needed that
James Joyce is that you?
The stanza breaks are nonsensical and excessive. Other than that this is a fine poem.
seconded
maybe she/he wanted to preserve how the thoughts fell onto the page
no backspace. sometimes when it takes a moment people might (enter) involuntarily
and don’t want to fix errors because they’re writing for themselves, and not others
and if the other person wanted to understand, they would.
maybe she’he is writing to preseve their own moment in time
in its original standing/form. not for demonstration.
maybe she/he is an old lady who is too weak to edit, or too intelig3nt to care.
fuck your rules and adherences.
we never know what the author is going through, from where they are writing. i love how lit critique is one big bully party. analysis is fine, but i'd rather encourage expression and thought/intention as opposed to formulaic measures. aka i wont shit on a siberian mute for not speaking in eng dialect because ~ ~ hand symbols are worse than oral communication. ~
>write in stream of consciousness
>autist criticizes and overanalyzes it as if it's my master thesis
why do people do this? i don't owe you a care.
someone vocaroo this pls
Not sure if pasta or autism. Maybe both.
>8 lines
>gap
>8 lines
>double gap
>2 lines
I hate this shit so much
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you too
What the FUCK is wrong with you
not
to
be
an
emo
but
how that person writes is none of your business
just close your eyes lmao aiaihaiaha nigga
like
worry about your damn self
maybe that person has lost everything and they have nothing to uphold. fuck spellcheck and grammar. they'll do whatever they please because they don't care to impress you or anyone else. if it makes sense to the author, that's all that should matter. who said it needs to make sense? you're a selfish fuck
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i do, it's forever
Edgy
great poem.
>This poem seems too simple.
Try to write a better one, maybe one that you think is not too simple, post it here and we will judge which we like better.