Hey Veeky Forums

Hey Veeky Forums

I have started writing my own sci-fi story, I have just finished chapter 1, would someone like to read it and say if it's good or not?

No. Too early. Finish a first draft. I can tell you if you have a good opening or not, but not a good story, and you'll be revising the first chapter after you finish the rough draft anyway, I hope. You'd be better off just posting the logline so I can judge the premise, protagonist, and title.

Post the first paragraph, we'll see from there if my incredibly precious time could be alloted further

Ok I understand.

I can post the first chapter(about 900 words) and then what I had in mind for the rest, I dont know with a "first draft" is(not native english speaker please forgive), because the first chapter is just an epilogue or rather little background to the main story, the first chapter takes place 20 years before second chapter if you understand.

Sure, just have to translate it first, give me a minute.

I took it through google translate because I am little drunk and lazy but I you get the sense of it. Here goes:

"Second Lieutenant Henrik Olsson was sitting in the passenger seat of a US military jeep that was driven by an enlisted man who had had the misfortune to have the night shift that evening.
They had received information that an unknown craft crashed out in the desert, which was odd because nothing appeared on radar and there was no information on any air activity in the area.

Most likely, this was yet another false alarm which was a result of the paranoia that has spread after the war and built up against the new enemy, the Communists, the red, the new enemy against democracy.

Henry had no high expectations of what they would find, in 9 out of 10 of these cases, it was nothing, just a civilian who looked somewhat natural phenomena or
Military activity and thought it was the beginning of an invasion, the other one of 10 so it was just someone who wanted to fuck and made a prank call.

Whether it was Henry is not happy about being forced out in the middle of the desert in the middle of the night to investigate something insignificant when he would rather have been able to be at home on the base and
slept or masturbated to their pornographic magazines, or if he had trouble sleeping, which he had often nowadays, have been harassing these poor fellows who had the night shift.
Anyway, it was he who was responsible officer at the time and he had to respond to the alarm and keep up with the patrol out and investigate what was going on."

And then I plan on having the rest of the story taking place some 20 years later and focusing on one member of a special task force sent to area 51 to "dreamland" (a section of area 51) and investigate, if any have played area 51 on the x box first generation it's a bit like that.

And excuse the bad grammar/what not I took it through google translate and this is just the base of it which will be edited later on, just something to stand on if you understand.

That which I posted was like 1/3 of the first chapter, I can post the rest also if you want.

>google translate
Get the fuck out, nigga

Why the fuck would you do this?

>post story
>publish story
>people google parts of your story and find it verbatim on a Veeky Forums board before the date it was published
everybody would know you Browne Veeky Forums, how embarrassing