ITT: great writers present their material to a creative writing class and we're the other students critiquing him
>"Kafka, don't you think we need some sort of explanation why Gregor turned into a bug? It just isn't believable that he'd turn into one for no reason. Also, that ending is just too depressing. Can't his family learn to tolerate his change and eventually love him or something?"
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>"Kafka, you turned in another unfinished, basically non-sensical story. What is this about? It was funny at the beginning, but now it's just getting old. What the hell was that endless dialogue about Barnabas and his family? And why didn't K. just go to the damn castle?
and what is the point of the innkeeeper showing K her dresses at the end? qre you trying to say that hell never get to the castle and he is now just another villager? and why does everyone talk like a lawyer its very unbelievable.
>"Hey Dave, I really liked this story after you recommended to the class that we should read nothing but Derrida and DeLillo before reading your short (223 page) story because there was just no chance of us understanding the work otherwise. I really think what you did here was really tough and important for the rest of the class, to try and help us break out of our lol "dogmatic slumber" (he nudges the beret sitting next to him). But yea I really liked the part with the depressing paradox in the movie theater. It reminded me of Wittgenstein and Borges. I also liked how you made the female character, I think her name was Taylor (extra points for androgyny (lol get my irony Dave that I'm subtly communicating)), into a drug addict. It's like you're not afraid to like combine the cerebral with the passionate. Dirty Realism. Minimalism. And so of course bandanna man, dictionary please? Thesaurus, usage dictionary, human oneness, monads."
>hey chuck i really think you should give AA a chance
why does he shoot the arab
I really think you should cut the marine biology infodump. It draws too much focus away from the gay romance (which I love btw!).
Why are those chapters there, I'm halfway through and they just seem odd and out of place.
>Virginia, you can't just use semicolons whenever you feel like it, there are rules to follow for punctuation
>why are you sentences so long
>the story was very well written but I think maybe you should consider writing about something that happens? Like some kind of plot maybe?
>How come you keep jumping around between past and present tense?
>Mrs. Woolf you wrote an entire story about the lives of a family but you only have two lines of dialogue
>Why do you keep asking the reader questions? Isn't that our job?
>why are you so obsessed with inanimate objects?
>Why do all of your characters spend so much time alone, shouldn't they be interacting with one another more?
>Show, don't tell
>Was it supposed to be sad?
>I'm sorry but, like, nothing happened? It was just a married couple thinking about loneliness and isolation? Isn't that like the opposite of marriage? It was just sad and boring?
Feminists like to pull the "Woolf had to teach herself in her father's study because she was a woman and not allowed an education" card but honestly I think she was better off. School would've ruined her
hemingway you write like a faggot