The Rape of Maggie Marie

Enough of this Young Adult pleb shit.

Well, there are, but they tend to be weird badly-written online erotica and you can very clearly tell that they were written for the personal enjoyment of the writer and not much else.
This might be up your alley: jimgoad.net/pdf/violence/rapeworldintro.pdf

The second stanza exposes a real weakness in the writing that makes this superficial shock-poetry boring. If you're gonna try so hard, then at least be interesting

I like it desu good work. Not as edgy as everyone is saying

>whole point is an explicit "raping makes me feel alive
>uses rhyme to the same effect as Plath's Daddy (one of her edgier pieces because of this sarcastic nursery rhyme gait)
>obvious place-holder words in the meter
>not edgy shit

You want good un-apologetic rape? look to Yeats for inspiration

>You want good un-apologetic rape
Honestly yes. It seems like a very underused theme considering how common murder is in lit.
>Yeats for inspiration
Anything specific?

Quite based, could be Slayer lyrics

Leda and the Swan is about the sublimity of being raped by a goose.

OP here

It's not supposed to be shocking. This isnt a "fuck society I'm going to be edgy" poem.

It's just my attempt at trying to get inside the mind if a rapist. My attempt at imagining how thrilling it must feel to a rapist to do what he is doing. Obviously to cross that kind of line, the reward from their experience must be more than just busting a nut.

Ripoff of Denis Johnson's "Carcrash While Hitchiking"

Tao Lin's Richard Yates
Catcher in the Rye

It'd be nice if people read real poetry before attempting poetry desu

Nael, age 6 has gone down a really dark path.

>This isn't a "fuck society I'm going to be edgy" poem.

It's like you actually believe that. KEK!

I dont like most poetry. Its all very generic and overly emotional. Like they are desperately trying to be profound. Theres always some reference about crimson and about emptiness.

I write what I think could be more properly as shitpoetry. Its purely for me, not for others.

>Its all very generic and overly emotional
that's exactly what good poetry avoids
>they are desperately trying to be profound
I prefer ambition to resignation
>always some reference about crimson and about emptiness
have you only read amateur poetry?

Try this one
poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/detail/92665

>purely for me, not for others
>proceeds to post poem

Get this degenerate shit of my board you subversive kike

>I pushed further deep inside
>That feeling was oh so fleeting
Awful, the worst lines in the poem.
>further deep
>oh so
You need to change that. It's not good overall, but those lines stick out.
>not edgy
Okay, try writing a new one.

>is about the sublimity of being raped by a goose.
>sublimity

No.

yes

terrible

>projecting

Why didn't you post it this way? Occidental based people will tend to look at an image from left to right, now if you are trying to instillate this kind of rape aurea I'd suggest you post the photo in a way in which the look of the watcher follows the POV of the raper inconscially.

Post your best rape poem then bruh

Goes the same for any faggot on here. I wrote it in 30 seconds for laughs, but still better than if any of you plebs took an hour to write one with your poverty tier IQ.

nah

BUTTHURT

>wrenches AND slants rhymes in a pile of attempted meter
>spent 30 mins on it
>calls me a poverty-tier IQ

I can feel your frustration.

I dont even know what meter is. I dont care either. If poetry is art, and art is organic, than I wont make it scientific. Labeling everything about art is an attempt at making it rational, which is anti-art.

Nah just saying if it took me 30 secs to come up with something not half bad, guaranteed it would take you fags an hour or more to come with something that is not even a fraction as good as what I did.

My artistic abilities are god tier.

>art (from the same root as artificial) must be organic

Meter isn't anti-art its a fucking technique that allows a consistent rhythm. Techniques are used in every art-form.

Literally nothing of value

When I raped Maggie Marie
*crawling in my skin starts playing*
I watched the blood dancing in her eyes
*sharpens katana*
As I choked her lifeless body
*looks at you under his fedora*
I pushed further deep inside
*posts gore webm on /an/*

That feeling was oh so fleeting
*joins MGTOW*
I could barely contain the high
*tells you that morality is a spook*
When I raped Maggie Marie
*>nothing personell, kid*
My God was I alive
*slices you in half*

BTFO

I raped Maggie Marie, said the man
played a trick to get her in his van
Her vageni got cold
She was stiff as a board
And he posted his poem on Veeky Forums

Edgy yet uninteresting