ITT: Language that betrays the shittyness of the author
I'll start
>cursed under his breath
EVERY TIME
Stale turns of phrases
Jacob Hill
Josiah Anderson
>"the words of an individual, blah blah". Said Xer in an grumpy manner.
OH REALLY, COULDN'T YOU TELL ME HE SAID IT IN A GRUMPY MANNER BEFORE HE SAYS IT.
GOD DAMN
HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO READ THIS OUT LOUD
WHY DO PEOPLE BEGIN WITH THE QUOTE THEN SAY WHO AND HOW?
Michael Reyes
There should be a level DH7, where, instead of refuting, you show that the other's conclusion actually feeds back into your premises, or that your argument somehow comprehends the other's.
Anyway:
>stretched his legs
Ryder Hughes
elaborate
Nathaniel Sanchez
>darkness covered his eyes
Mason Green
Gotta love shit like that.
I mean what does "stretching your legs" even involve. I can think of many ways to stretch a leg.
They'd probably be better off saying something like: "he got up and slowly extended each leg to his side".
Ethan Ortiz
>knit his brow
What the fuck does this even look like? Like with needles and shit? Why do people do this so often in books?
Colton James
fucking homer again with this bullshit
Robert Sanders
>She folded her arms across her breasts
As opposed to what? Her ankles? Double shit points for pairing an adjective of any sort with breasts like pert or ample
Jaxon Anderson
George Martin does this exact kind of thing, I don't know about that sentence exactly but over describing breasts in general.
>*Character* blinked
I don't know why but it bothers me when a full sentence is just them blinking.